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Thank you so much for this carefully-constructed response! I hope you enjoyed this, and thank you for pointing out areas of improvement for this work. I'm not sure if I'll get around to implementing them, but I'll definitely focus on your words the next time I write something.
This, as my first experience writing for the site, has been really helpful in strengthening my writing skills and becoming aware of what I need to improve.
wowzer, i finally made it! huge massive thanks to my critters:
PostingDoge
Charliehorse
Zozigazagazongo
(waiting on the last person's wikidot username)
really proud of this one!
Thanks for your advice. I'll try to rewrite this and ask some help to make it better. I'm still new, and Im always willing to improve my works. Again, thanks for your help.
Been trying to fix this for ages and finally thought I got it
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the css theme is broken on mobile.
not unearably so, but it is broken.
Discord: hyenapunk
Reason: I've only been a member of the Wiki for a short time, but I've been reading SCP stuff since the early 2010s. I've been a creative writer my whole life, and I've got a background in editing and revision. I want to help others become better writers, and hopefully use my experience giving critique to one day write my own pieces for the Wiki!
Thank you for the opportunity.
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(It's worth noting that a number of pages tagged "three-moons-initiative" are only tagged that due to featuring Corbenic, and don't actually involve the Initiative at all—so with a separate tag, there's no point keeping that tag. I'll put together a list myself if I get the chance.)
A frighteningly straightforward introduction to the man who's most responsible for the Circus, Herman Fuller himself.
It was completely redundant to mention the truck driver becoming a Class D.
I really respect what this article sets out to do, and I really like the phrase "Does the black moon howl?", but this is a piece that shows its age in ways that make me unable to like it.
The foundation is ridiculously trigger happy throughout in a way that doesn't really make sense when you get down to it, there's a lot of clunky diegetic insertions of action into the text that fall apart on closer look (Why is there a warning for their being an explosion being "detected" in the HR office?).
The big email is far too expository for me, it clarifies what's going on with the typewriter and what the conflict is in a way that removes a lot of what could make the article work in the mystery department.
In short: Cool format, cool intent, clunky and messy execution.
amazing work! i clocked the reference pretty early and was a bit worried that this would turn out to be a "hey its just like that thing you know!", but those worries were completely unnecessary. you captured that same sense of melancholy and nostalgia i get from the book. i like that you used pattern-screamers as your method of interpretation, it works well as a way to scp-ifiy the reference material while remaining generally thematically coherent.
First of all, you clearly put a lot of time and effort into this. I feel like YOU, the author, care about these characters and what happens to them. That's a good feeling to have while reading a story, so I thank you for that experience.
I also loved the beginning of the article and the way it frames the lake as some kind of miracle water, healing the wounds of forest creatures. That automatically introduces some tension, because I suspect things aren't what they seem.
I think my favorite moment in the entire story is when the doctor asks D-23682 to relate his encounter with SCP-9523 in his own words, and is surprised that the first thing he mentions is how anxious he felt around all these armored guys with guns (including a guard who hates him) walking him through a natural environment he's had little exposure to and has lately been cut off from. That's just…so good. It underlines that there is a *total power imbalance between the subject and the doctor*, no matter how kindly the doctor behaves, and reminds us that the doctor isn't truly empathizing with the other man at all. Exchanges like this are much more powerful than characters outright stating how they feel/what their motives are.
This power imbalance and the idea of this D-Class as a vessel for the doctor to work out his own trauma—with no real regard for who the other man is and what he wants or respect for his agency—is the strongest part of the story.
I also loved the haunting imagery of the hooded figure. I don't like when the supernatural is world-built into something quantifiable and unremarkable, so I thought their presence and mysterious motives were great.
I do feel like certain aspects of the story are belabored to the detriment of the whole. I'm going to be specific about these points, since they're why I'm stuck on a novote.
I think a lot of readers are going to have no issue with these things. I'm just commenting on them because I appreciate the effort that went into completing this story. I hope you feel pride in your work!
What would happen if a can of SCP-2057 were to be opened with 344? I have been wondering this for 2 years until I decided to ask both writers today.
In the end, nothing last forever
What would happen if one of these cans were to be opened with SCP-344? I have been wondering this for over 2 years and finally decided to ask the writer.
Greenlighting per IRC discussion.
Why does it take until the fourth test for them to realize items are being teleported rather than simply disappearing, when the second test demonstrates that very clearly with the researcher?