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by More PowerMore Power, 08 Mar 2021 23:37

SCP-5428 is a brass statue of a fox, standing at a height of 92 centimeters and weighing 34.0194 kilograms. It is inscribed with random anglo-saxon runes, the only word being "Rika". Whether this is the name of the SCP or it's creator is unknown. SCP-5428 is mobile, and acts like a normal vulpine despite it being made completely out of brass. It is capable of making various fox-like sounds, but incapable of speech and does not seem to be sapient.

Deleted at -21 and three votes.

SCP-5914 is a humanoid creature that is 1.91 meters ,and is the color black.You can see him sitting routinely. He also breathes very heavily and has hazel eyes, though he may look like a tall human individual, he is far from human. He has sharp teeth with specs of blood on his them. not much blood anywhere else.Anytime you come into the room he gets aggravated, he will not get aggravated when you are looking through the bulletproof glass,but when you make him aggravated he gets very aggressive and most likely will kill you, he kills you by biting your neck and sucking your blood, he in fact does not have claws but very sharp teeth so one bite and your done.

Deleted at -16 and three votes.

SCP-5272-1 is the designation given to a belief system that, when practiced for exactly seven days, will lead to the sudden disappearance of the individual practicing it. SCP-5272-1 is a monotheistic religion focusing on an unnamed deity that is often referred to as Esurientes by SCP-5272-2. SCP-5272-1 has very few restrictions, only barring the consumption of any inedible or toxic items, and seemingly promoting a life of indulgence. While SCP-5272-1 has been documented in several areas around the world, it seems to be mainly concentrated in North America. The spread of SCP-5272-1 appears to be entirely by word of mouth, lacking any anomalous memetic components.

Deleted at -13 and three votes.

Seeking Greenlights: Yes

Page Type: SCP Article

Genre (Optional): Mystery, Story (possibly horror, depending on critique)

Page Layout (Optional): Traditional SCP layout with incident logs and interview

Elevator Pitch: This dude is literally using liquid metal to get into people's minds? What the heck man.

Central Narrative: During testing there are seemingly contradictory psychological reactions to the subject, with seemingly no direct action taken by it, but also the very violent physical reactions when certain things are at stake.

Hook/Attention-Grabber: Backstory and unanswered questions, and the experiments with other scp's.

Additional Notes: Basically my SCP sounds like it suffers from the superhero syndrome at first, but once you get reading it sounds much different, the mystery and conflicting reactions make the reader feel just enough confusion, neither too much or too little.

Wieldable liquid metal by Doctor Walker SDoctor Walker S, 08 Mar 2021 23:16

Beginning deletion vote at -10.

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Staff Post - Deletion Vote by HexickHexick, 08 Mar 2021 23:05

Looks great, love the video game boy. +1

by Panda_of_GreenPanda_of_Green, 08 Mar 2021 22:59
MrRoninMrRonin 08 Mar 2021 22:50
in discussion Per Page Discussions / Per page discussions » SCP-2744

I was a little on the fence, but I will give it the upvote as you did a good job of displaying the effects and glow of the first time weed smoker! I also enjoyed the formatting, easy on the eyes. A few thoughts:

- I believe the Foundation would have a zero tolerance policy for drugs. Even though the majority of the site is stoned, there is no straight man to juxtapose their silly behavior (aside from the RAISA note at the top)
- It would also be interesting to explore the continued behaviors of the site personnel. Do they face minor withdrawals (irritability, moodiness) when deprived of their internet weed? Do they experience tolerance? Does a personnel get unlucky and a predisposition for schizophrenia develop? Or perhaps none of these behaviors apply as it is tied to the personality of the junior researcher, who may have moved on to other substances or sobriety?

Keep it up!

by MrRoninMrRonin, 08 Mar 2021 22:50

Yeah, I wasn’t too sure about genre lol. I was thinking of the tree as large with branches that dip down and then arch up so that the curve of each branch grazes the ground (if that makes any sense). As for what the kids write on the tree with; anything organic like mud, charcoal, blood etc. I also want the planting date of the tree to be ambiguous- I doubt they recorded the planting of every tree two hundred years ago and I want it to be a normal tree up until the point it suddenly becomes anomalous. Name-wise, I’d imagine the kids would come up with one. Something punny I’d say like Bark-ley. Yeah, definitely punny.

Personally, I'm gonna have to give this one -1.
I agree with most of the points from the above comment, although I do think crossover SCPs can work if executed very well. This one was not, in my opinion. Seriously though, the above comment covers almost all of what I want to say.
I will add that I have read Homestuck (and enjoyed it quite a bit at that), and still didn't enjoy this article. I feel it's more of a problem of execution than of concept, however. Everything feels extremely vague and disconnected, and I can't understand everything even after reading through all of this article multiple times. I did chuckle a bit when I read the first footnote, but when the best reaction I get from an article is a chuckle, that's not really a good thing.

by b0b_the_guyb0b_the_guy, 08 Mar 2021 22:17

[[Place Holder: Came back to take a second look. Will crit within 24 hours]]

Perfectly understandable! ^^

by RallistonRalliston, 08 Mar 2021 22:11

Seeking Greenlights: Yes

Page Type: SCP Article

Genre (Optional): Action(?), Fun(?)

Page Layout (Optional): Standard, including interview of subject w/ commentary of events.

Elevator Pitch: "The Ultimate Immersive Game", a simple board game (The Game-of-Ur, AKA Twenty squares, a predecessor to modern Backgammon) excavated in southern Iraq. Despite initially not knowing how to play, a subject will instinctively begin to move the pieces only in accordance to the set of rules (as if everyone knows how.) Players, as they play, are mentally transported to a video game-like reality of a random genre (Fantasy, Sci-fi, etc.,) and are placed into situations that demand their interaction and force their separation into opposing factions/teams. The only consistent factor is the presence of SCP-xxx-01, a being of particular descriptive qualities that appears as the "game-master" in every game. Physically, the subjects seem only to play the game in a deep state of focus until interrupted. In addition, subjects will move their pieces in a manner consistent with their progress through the "game".

Central Narrative: The story of a round of this Game-of-Ur (or perhaps several) between two rival subjects (Scientists?) intermingled with their recollection of their mental "game". A short series of events leads the two subjects into becoming leaders of their respective factions (Humans vs Elves? Cops & Robbers? West vs. East? Undecided as of yet) and one must defeat the other before they are allowed to end the game. A five-minute round of this simple board game can feel like a five-year war between the two players, and the players come out of their game with a different perspective, not unlike waking from a dream but very rarely are the players negatively affected.

Hook/Attention-Grabber: The Game-of-Ur is a very real game (which, from what I can see, has never been included in SCP), and there is some irony about a simple board game being the most "immersive" game in existence. Endless possibilities for Safe-level fun and perhaps some connection with other SCPs from that era/area (Cain & Able, "God"/Dave, etc.)

Additional Notes: The more I wrote about this, the more it began to sound like the recent Jumanji movies' plots—this will probably be my biggest hurdle. Got the idea from playing Rimworld, a surprisingly simple, yet immersive video game for me, with the Game-of-Ur being a craftable item in it. Researching the real artifact/game itself and its rule also provided some ideas (was apparently used to tell the players' futures and gave life advice.)

The Game-of-Ur by StaarmanStaarman, 08 Mar 2021 22:04

I wonder if anyone asked about the Children of the Night.

by Count DVBCount DVB, 08 Mar 2021 21:57

Seeking Greenlights: No

Page Type: SCP Article

Elevator Pitch:

  • Set in the 80s.
  • Arcadia bound a deal-making demon inside a Pac-Man arcade cabinet, but four of their wizards became trapped as well.
  • Now the Foundation has it. A corrupt researcher abuses its wish-granting powers.
  • Researcher feeds it too many souls, and it escapes.
  • Foundation & the ghosts of the Arcadia wizards cooperate to imprison the demon again.

Central Narrative: Several documents:

  • Original file: RAISA disclaimer that it’s been tampered with. Describes anomaly as Safe-class spooky video game that only accepts quarters covered in blood.
  • Test log discovered during post-breach investigation of Dr. Mitchell: test of the object, revealing that it grants wishes in exchange for bloody quarters (which trap the soul of the deceased). Flickering, robed figures are seen on camera but not by people in the room.
  • Log of notable events related to Dr. Mitchell: bought a fancy house and car, married a younger woman, promoted to Site Director.
  • PoI interview: a member of Arcadia found out that the Foundation had this machine and warned them not to use it. He was one of five wizards who participated in the binding, but the demon overpowered them and trapped the souls of the other four in the machine with it. Dr. Mitchell doesn’t listen and locks him up.
  • Containment breach footage: Video from the containment chamber, where Dr. Mitchell gives the machine a quarter and the demon escapes. It mocks and devours him, then goes on a rampage. Flickering figures reappear on the video.
  • Post-breach interview with Site-15 security chief: suspected that Dr. Mitchell was somehow corrupt. Made his way to XXXX's chamber during the breach, saw the figures on the video, and followed their instructions to completely disassemble the machine and release them as well. He and the ghosts then made their way to the PoI holding cells and released the captured Arcadian.
  • Containment breach footage: the five Arcadians surround the demon in some central location and, after an intense magical battle, trap it in an Atari 2600.
  • Revised file: describes SCP-XXXX in its current state.

Hook/Attention-Grabber: On the mainlist, the title "PACt-MAN" will hopefully catch peoples' eyes. Hopefully the story of the Foundation screwing up, then cooperating with a GoI to fix it will be an interesting story. New Arcadia content should catch some attention as well.

Additional Notes: Is the plot too cliched or predictable?

PACt-MAN by KothardarastrixKothardarastrix, 08 Mar 2021 21:42

alright, so it has some potential… I think you need to describe the tree a little bit more like what it looks like and if it speaks. another thing I suggest is what the children use to write on the trunk. where it says the kids don't die of starvation you could say "the subjects or kids will not die of starvation and dehydration". and might I suggest you put "who" planted the tree and what the tree is called. and you should try making testing logs for the tree on how they tried to contain it. it also seems like this article is not an "emotional article" or a "horror-ish article" but more of a funny article.

Re: Sentient, Angry Tree by ShadyApplesShadyApples, 08 Mar 2021 21:39

This was originally meant to be Fifthism! However, I removed the Fifthism references because I felt like it dragged the mystery down and it turned it into "oh it's just more Fifthist shenanigans". I was still trying to capture that vibe, however.

Re: +1 by LaneousLaneous, 08 Mar 2021 21:35
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