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This is a skip about boats.
Thanks to everybody in chat who gave thoughts and things, primarily Jekeled and TwistedGears. I don't know why I keep taking their advice, but it hasn't failed me yet.
Anyway, as always, your comments, critiques, and criticisms are always welcome :D
I love this. Can we get one of these things to fight 1264? Pleeease?
Maybe this is a nitpick, and someone more experienced than me can contradict me if I'm incorrect, but:
Instances of SCP-2120 are various anomalous sailing vessels that randomly
The ship in the photo isn't a sailing vessel, as far as I can see, and neither are several of the vessels detailed in the logs, maybe "naval" would be a better descriptor?
Otherwise, this one is very interesting, and I'm a sucker for alternate reality world wars.
That's the word I was looking for! Thanks dude. I was stuck on that, and naval was exactly what I wanted there.
Not my taste, so don't take this badly. You know I love ya.
Living the dream, or dreaming the life?
An interesting concept. I initially thought that this would be a Bermuda Triangle skip, but that quickly changed. The last log made me think of SCP-1393. What if the two were connected somehow?
EDIT:
This might be only for me, but "Instance appears in the design of-" in the addendum sounds a little odd to me. Maybe "Instance physically resembles-" would work better?
I like the article, but I have 1 minor nitpick. You say the instances materialize 5km below the surface, but I don't think there's any part of the ocean that deep near Bermuda. That would be oceanic trench deep.
Once you drop off the continental shelf, it pretty rapidly goes down to around 8,000 to 10,000 feet, but that's only 3 km deep. You are correct in that there is no part of the ocean around there that is that deep.
What actually stuck out to me more was the description of 2120-02; a clipper was a specific type of sailing vessel and one of the last types of ships built during the Age of Sail. Not only does it make no sense for there to be any kind of power source for a clipper (and thus there should be no source of fuel), they were never militarized. They were fast, narrow ships built for hauling small cargoes of very valuable goods (such as silver or tea) very quickly; their design would not have been useful for naval warfare by any means.
If -02 was merely a ship resembling a clipper, or if it had clearly been modified for warfare use, then that should receive special mention in the article. As it stands, it reads like something written by someone who has no clue what a clipper is.
I didn't they it was a clipper ship, just that it resembled one. I also said it was made out of plastic. I imagine most clippers probably weren't made out of plastic.
Err… Thanks for that, though. Appreciate the comment.
Edit: Additionally,
Several mounts for large artillery pieces are visible across the deck, but are empty.
That doesn't count as receiving special mention?
My issue is that the very definition of a "clipper ship" requires three masts, square rigging, and a narrow hull. Without all three of those features present, they would not have called it a clipper. If the resemblance is close enough such that they would call it a clipper, then it clearly has sails. If it has sails, then what is the fusion core for?
Don't get me wrong, you can have all these things on the ship, but it's all in the tone and sentiment as to how your reader receives it. Admittedly, I'm a big fan of naval warfare in the age of sail and probably knows more than your average reader, but to me it reads as if you simply picked the "most advanced" ship of the age of sail and used the name without understanding what that term implies.
This is what you wrote:
Subject appears in the design of a 19th century clipper ship. Hull is constructed entirely of plastic. Fuel source indeterminate, appears to be a failed cold-fusion reactor. Several mounts for large artillery pieces are visible across the deck, but are empty.
This is what I'm suggesting as an alternative:
Instance appears to be a ship of similar design to a 19th century clipper ship, notably modified for military use instead of trade. Several gun mounts are present on the deck, but all were found empty. A device that appears to be a non-functional cold fusion reactor was found below deck, purpose unknown. Hull is composed entirely of plastic.
Fair enough. I'll make that change, it's a good one. Thanks!
Much better. With that and the depth issue fixed, downvote has been rescinded.
I see what you did there, approve, and follow suit.
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Do these ships ever have dead crewmen on them? If they are serving vessels, shouldn't there be crew? If not, that might be worth mentioning.
From the notes, it looks like they where dumping them off. Doesn't say anything about being destroyed in battle.
they were ships that weren't sent to the front, just dumped due to war crimes. not wrecked/destroyed
