Deletions 56: It's so infinite that its flavor text says,

Summary:

[thread archived]

page 1 of 12123...1112next »

Deletions 56: It's so infinite that its flavor text says,

Zyn 04 Jan 2019 08:57

"It's so infinite that its flavor text says, "It's so infinite that its flavor text says, _{"It's so infinite that its flavor text says}

All Staff-enacted Deletions are carried out according to the Deletions Guide.

Summary deletions result for:

• Articles with malicious intent
• Pages that are clearly unfinished.
• Attempts to "game" site procedure, such as re-posting a non-rewritten article in an attempt to get around downvotes.
• Blatantly plagiarized material.
• An article posted outside of the current range.

If an author attempts to self-delete their work and fails to do so properly, including either by blanking the page or renaming it, it will be deleted properly by Staff.

Last edited on 04 Jan 2019 08:58 by Zyn Show more

Re: Deletions 56: It's so infinite that its flavor text says,

Jacob Conwell 05 Jan 2019 01:53

---

SCP-4986 is a 25.4 cm crucifix produced by [REDACTED]. Any humanoid within 3 meters of SCP-4986 will experience an uncontrollable urge to practice Catholicism, regardless if they previously didn't have knowledge of Catholicism. The other anomalous property is that when SCP-4986 is within 10 meters of a humanoid performing an action against Catholic doctrine, they will immediately stop performing the action.

Deleted at -20 and three votes.

Feedback Ported:

Dr Fujimura

+ show block

As it is written, this is just an anomalous object and not an SCP.

Definitely do spend the time developing this on the forums and in your sandbox before trying the idea again.

LordSpy

+ show block

I actually like the idea of something so apparently powerful being used for something so mundane as keeping students well-behaved, but that is not enough to carry an article.

---

SCP-4757 is a teacup Welsh Corgi puppy. The puppy's collar is a diamond studded watch with a simple leather band, the time frozen at 11:57. SCP-4757 does not appear to age, and has remained a puppy for at least ████ years.
The existence of the dog was initially discovered through a peice of parchment found amongst the Dead Sea Scrolls appearing to be a lost page of the Book of Revelations. The page states, in metaphorical terms, that the end of the world as depicted in the Book of Revelations will start with the death of SCP-4757.
Immediately after the capture of SCP-4757, a group of cultists raided the compound. Most were shot by security guards, however one was captured alive and interrogated. Psychoanalysis revealed that he was suffering from the symptoms of schizophrenia and depression. He revealed that the raiders' goal was to kill SCP-4757.

Deleted at -18 and three votes.

Feedback Ported:

GuardianNWC

+ show block

You need to change the article title from "Scp 4757" to "SCP-4757". The term "puppy" or "dog" shouldn't be used at all, instead always refer to it as "SCP-4757" except the beginning which you could describe it like "SCP-4757 is an instance of Canis lupus familiaris¹".In general, though I think the article needs a bit more substance (if you're not submitting this to the cliche con) cause it's just a dog that if you kill it everyone dies, which is a very cliche.

LordSpy

+ show block

It's too silly to use the Book of Revelation as a predictor of this thing's existence and importance. Well, on the whole this is silly. I get some degree of said silliness is the point, but if you overdo it the whole thing ends up feeling as nothing more than "lolsorandum". Sorry, but the whole thing ends up falling flat on its face.

---

SCP-4984 is a 3x2 meter black hole on the front of a 5x5 meter wall. SCP-4984-A is a pool of blood depending on who ever entered the size of blood will change.

Deleted at -25 and three votes.

---

SCP-4347 is a invisible liquid inside of a 1/2 liter clear bottle. When SCP-4347 is digested the subject reportedly feels nauseous and tired and will slowly turn transparent, after 24 hours the subject will become invisible and named SCP-4347-2. Personnel guarding SCP-4347-2 often forget what they are doing and what SCP-4347-2 is. After 36 hours Personnel will forget what SCP-4347-2 is and will just walk off in mid conversation with SCP-4347-2.

Deleted at -18 and three votes.

Feedback Ported:

Dr Fujimura

+ show block

You've got half or slightly less than half of an article here. This really needs a recovery log or expanded logs to hook people. I am left with the basis of good questions but this is fundamentally just not expansive enough.

Looks like you cold-posted this; please take a visit to the critique and feedback forum and set up a sandbox to get this main-series ready.

LordSpy

+ show block

Weak upvote.

I rather like the potential, because it subverts being a mere invisibility potion by also playing into the fear of being completely ignored by others. It's rather skeletal and maybe could use some expansion, but at the same time I think bloating it too much would kill its charm. Obviously most other people think it's not up to par, but if you are gonna rewrite it, don't go overboard.

---

SCP-4059 is a small creature with an appearance resembling a young female. It has black eyes and hair, fairly sharp teeth, pale white skin and currently wears a hospital gown.

SCP-4059 was first found deep a forest in [DATA EXPUNGED], carrying a note that read ‘3LL1N4’ , which is thought to be a form of the name ‘Ellina’. It wore a dirty brown gown made out of rags.It will respond to any word, as the entity understands English and can speak most sentences.

Deleted at -18 and three votes.

Feedback Ported:

LordSpy

+ show block

Nitpick first.

resembling a young female

So it resembles a young female… what? A hippopotamus? A whale? A crocodile? A deep-sea angler? Typing out "human" is not going to rob you of any time.

The article goes nowhere. It's a weird forest girl who was some abilities and… that's it. It's not strange enough to stand on its own, and an isolated incident of it detecting a window which needed repairs is not a great story on its own to carry the entire article.

---

SCP-4787 is a male Bradypus variegatus (Brown-Throated Sloth) of unknown origin. It measures 62 cm (2.03 ft) and weights 4.2 kg (9.2 lbs) which changes slightly as it continues to remain in containment. It's age is unknown, but testing indicates that it is 9-13 years old. How it came into the care of the Foundation is unknown. On [REDACTED] Class D Personnel ████████ (Deceased) entered a unoccupied holding cell in Research Site 104 to do a regularly scheduled cleaning and discovered SCP-4787 in the cell. It made no hostile movement towards him and exhibited the normal behavior expected of a sloth. He reported the finding to the Site Director who sent researchers to the cell along with a small response team. Footage within the cell was interrupted at [REDACTED] P.M. and when the cameras began running again at [REDACTED] P.M. SCP-4787 was already inside the cell. Footage from outside the cell shows no personnel entering or exiting the cell at this time. It is unknown whether the interruption of the camera was the doing of SCP-4787.

GuardianNWC

+ show block

The title of the article page should be changed to whichever number it is, the description should be a DESCRIPTION of the item, not anything more all extra things go into addendums.

LordSpy

+ show block

The concept isn't terrible, but "is it actually anomalous?" has been done at least twice before, and in both cases there was significantly more reason to question whether or not that was the case. This is a conclusion too sudden to appear realistic (you cannot make Foundation researchers naive to the point of incompetence), as its appearance could just as well be linked to a third party or outside phenomena.

---

SCP-Thing-J

stahp i told u it is a disease

Deleted at -29 and three votes.

---

SCP-UN0-J Appears to be a standard "Uno" card set (Complete with the four suits, Red, Green, Yellow and Blue, each consisting of one 0 card, two 1 cards, two 2s, 3s, 4s, 5s, 6s, 7s, 8s and 9s; two Draw Two cards; two Skip cards; and two Reverse cards. In addition there are four Wild cards and four Wild Draw Four cards.)

Deleted at -23 and three votes.

Feedback Ported:

Crashington

+ show block

2 nitpicks:
1. Why did they test with researchers? That seems highly unprofessional.
2. Why did they stop the experiments on it just because someone got angry and tried to assault someone? The Foundation has continued testing through much much worse.

I wouldnt say theres anything particularily wrong with this otherwise, but its so completely bare bones and boring.

The effect is in no aspect unique and not very interesting.

The log doesnt tell us anything new really and theres nothing you didnt expect from a log for a skip with this effect.

In the end this doesnt make me feel anything, all it does is tell you the effect and then tell you the effect with a log again. With an effect this boring and over done this just does not work.

Unless you seriously flesh this out, this will stay a -1 from me.

Duke of Nothing

+ show block

You should expand upon this article, as well as improve some of the parts such as the researchers being the ones directly testing the SCP, when the Foundation would use D-Class. Not only that, but also the Foundation would not give up on testing so easily. I don't know, maybe you haven't spent enough time on this website to understand how things work, and if so, you should. Research more into the lore and depths of how the Foundation works, as well as add a bit more oomph to your creation.

LordSpy

+ show block

If you are going to turn an old meme into an article, even a joke one, you better have your execution be spot on. This is the joke played straight, and more than half of the article is just what people were already expecting.

---

SCP-4441 Is a humanoid female, shackled to a wall from It's hands. SCP-4441 Is also missing It’s head due to what appears to be an enraged attack with a sharp weapon. Neither the identity or the head of SCP-4441 have yet to be discovered. SCP-4441 was discovered by Dr.███ during a vacation in ███ , and moved to site-██ in Finland on 4/█/19██. The shackles cannot be removed from SCP-4441's hands, but a piece of the wall where the shackles connect can. There always seems to be a slight wind in SCP-4441's chamber varying in speed, the highest recorded wind flow velocity being 10.7 m/s.

Deleted at -18 and three votes.

Feedback Ported:

LordSpy

+ show block

Anyways, I rather like the imagery here, but the actual development of the article seems to a be a bit too old school for its own good. Your structure can be boiled down to:

• Weird thing got found.
• Thing needs relatively complicated measures to remain relatively safe.
• This one time thing got out of hand.

While I am being extremely reductionist, this really isn't the most compelling story. Yes, some old articles get away with that, they add further elements that make the entire piece stand out.

You may want to read more modern articles to get a feeling of what works. The SCP-3000 Contest Hub in particular shows plenty of great horror-focused articles; the scope of many of these is possibly larger than for what you may want to aim, but they do show what the modern community likes.

---

SCP 4909 Is a copy of the popular video game “Grand Theft Auto V”. This disk appears to be completely normal until placing the disk into any device which can read it. When placed in, the screen will go static, and various sentences will flash across the screen. Some reported are “You don't want to feel the pain you inflict.”, “You deserve pain”, and typically the last sentence is “You will feel pain.” After this message, the viewer of the screen will begin feeling slowly increasing, pulling pain coming from all of their limbs. Within approximately 20 minutes, all limbs will have been torn off the body. After this has occurred, the disk will begin playing as if it were a normal copy of the game. However, when trying to eject the disk, it will be bulleted out of the player, and possibly decapitating those in its path. The disk was first spotted outside of a home in █████ , New York, with a sticky note on top reading “Enjoy The Game” The package did have an address on it, but when investigating the address, the last person who had lived in that house had commited suicide thirty-two years ago, in 1987. In the house, there was a receipt from █████ for 3 copies of the game, which may mean there are two other instances of SCP 4909. If found, these would become 4909-A and 4909-B and stored in the same glass container. The receipt was in the name of the deceased owner of the house.

Deleted at -23 and three votes.

Feedback Ported:

Sigkreiger

+ show block

Crits:

1x1 ft glass container

Why is glass specified here? Unless for a specific reason, glass probably isn't the best material to use a containment for a potentially dangerous object

2 Level 3 guards are to watch over 4909 at all times

This seems over the top. The object is safe, so having 2 guards watch over it at all times may not be necessary

it will be bulleted out of the player

You should probably specify "media player". When I first read this I had images in my head of disc's being shot out of the "player" playing the game

thirty-two years ago, in 1987

You should either remove "thirty-two years ago" or change it to "thirty-two years ago from the time this article was written" or something along those lines"

LordSpy

+ show block

We get it, it's gory and kills people in all sorts of over the top ways. It's also amazingly boring. All successful "dangerous" items we have succeed not only because they are deadly, but because either the way in which they are dangerous is interesting or because said danger plays into a good narrative.

---

Footnotes

1. Welsh teacup corgi

Re: Deletions 56: It's so infinite that its flavor text says,

A Random Day 05 Jan 2019 04:00

http://www.scp-wiki.net/scp-p373r-j summarily deleted for being an unedited repost of http://www.scp-wiki.net/scp-p373r . Witnessed by ProcyonLotor.

Instead of trying to repost the page to fix the URL, just edit the URL instead.

Re: Deletions 56: It's so infinite that its flavor text says,

Taffeta 05 Jan 2019 05:19

SCP-p373r-j deleted AGAIN for being an unedited repost to clear downvotes. Witnessed by ARD.

Re: Deletions 56: It's so infinite that its flavor text says,

Zyn 05 Jan 2019 08:23

SCP-3819 is a 6.193 quadrupedal entity with [REDACTED] on it's back. The tail of SCP-3819 is 2.1 m in length covered with black fur. SCP-3819 can open it's mouth ■■ m wide. SCP-3819 is seen to evolve at times. When agitated, SCP-3819 will grow in size. Addendum: SCP-3819 should be monitored at all times, -26 and three staff votes.

Feedback ported:

Dr Jaren

+ show block

I found a lot of prob,elms with pretty much the whole thing…. this is what I have to say.

[[collapsible show="+ the problems" hide="- BBB"]]
youre Gonna need more detail, also the doctors quotes are bland and don’t add much…

The whole test logs are really bland actually… also you never specified wether this creature can heal itself or not or is immune to damage…. it seems like it but…

Also this panders to the scary creature scp Cliche a lot… and it’s just not well written enough to get away with it…

SCP-3819 is seen to evolve at times. When agitated, SCP-3819 will grow in size.

That’s not how evolution works….

SCP-3819 can open it's mouth ■■ m wide.

Why is this black boxed? Why is this even a vital piece of information? I can’t see it being vital unless it’s an exaggerated trait… which I can’t tell because it’s black boxed… so you can se why that’s infuriating.

Your entire co tainment procedure doesn’t make much sense or is just difficult to understand…

Your tags are all over the place. You should figure that out.

"He is passive when not agitated." -Dr. Crenshaw

"He has another way of seeing" -Dr. Crenshaw

These are both the most bland way of stating what you’re trying to state. And generally shouldn’t be quotes….

is a 6.193 quadrupedal entity with [REDACTED] on it's back. The tail of SCP-3819 is 2.1 m in length covered with black fur.

Your description doesn’t say much other than four legs black tail. Also it is 6.193, whatever that means. Also the [REDACTED] on its back doesn’t add anything to this. There’s no reason for it to be redacted, and redacting it doesn’t tell us anything or give it a sense of mystery or make it any more interesting.

OthellotheCat

+ show block

Neither big nor dangerous are tags, but I don’t have the authority to remove tags so I can’t

Otherwise, there’s barely any information on this thing aside from “It’s big, it can kill, and there’s something on its back” and by not saying what’s on its back it takes out one of the features that doesn’t just make it a Spooky Murder Monster™️. Not that adding whatever is on its back would make the anomaly any more compelling, because there’s really no story.

Also, if it’s passive when not agitated, it’s not Keter, it’s Safe or Euclid at best. Stick it in a box and don’t piss it off.

lsmith7887

+ show block

Okay, so what “he” is isn’t exactly explained, and there doesn’t seem to be any real clues or allusions as to what it could be. All I can piece together is that it’s a four-legged predatory creature with a hairy tail, which doesn’t really make you want to guess either, as there are a lot of existing animals that match this criteria.

Also, the containment procedure seems extremely excessive. Underground? With three blast doors? I don’t even think that much caution is taken with containing 682.

Also, what exactly makes this creature Keter? Apart from the overkill containment procedures, there’s no evidence that this thing can escape or how it would. This leads me to guess that you went by the common misconception that Keter means it’s really super dangerous. So, I’d suggest you study more on the lore and meaning of certain terms used in-universe.

I also have to mention that the researchers keep referring to it as “he”. I’m not mentioning this for any political reasons, but rather that this just isn’t in-universe. Researchers don’t generally mention the creature as a he or a she. However, you could put at the start of the article that the creature is male, but this is usually used for more humanoid SCPs.

All-in-all, this article is non-descriptive, cliché, and all around unoriginal.

---

SCP-2291970-J, SCP-732 is a group of individuals that identify as "The Spanish Inquisition". (reffered to as TSI in this document.) Members of the foundation are to avoid saying "I did not expect" proceeded by any orginisation. If this is done, TSI will burst through any nearby door, and shout "Nobody expects the spanish inquisiton!" They will then list their 2, no wait 3, no hold on 4, chief weapons, -22 and three staff votes.

Feedback ported:

PeppersGhost

+ show block

Sorry, I didn't it funny. It's just a rehash of the original Monty Python sketch, except with all the humor taken out of it.

---

SCP 4924 Is a black limousine which is usually spotted in largely urban areas. This limousine seems to have no regard for traffic laws, but will follow the road, and phase through other vehicles. SCP 4924 will come to a halt next to a large group of people. Then the back window of the limousine will unroll, and SCP 4924-1 will be seen. It has been reported to be a skeleton with a suit on, -19 and three staff votes.

Feedback ported:

NetherGranite

+ show block

Congratulations on writing an SCP! For me, the idea was interesting, but it was underdeveloped. It has the potential to be creepy and unnerving, but I think it needs a little more substance (e.g. addendums adding previously unknown information, incident logs, test logs, discovery logs, etc.). Especially interesting would be an addendum explaining how it was captured—that being, how did you trick the limousine into driving into your underground containment chamber? And once it was there, what did you do to prevent it from just leaving?

Greenteadragon

+ show block

Unfortunately, this reads more like a first draft than a polished article. I'd recommend taking it back to the forums or the chat so it can be thoroughly critiqued and rewritten. Good luck :)

ItsDenali

+ show block

The idea of this SCP is certainly an interesting one that could be developed into a mainlist article if given enough work, but isn't fully delivered upon in this article for a number of reasons:

• Sections of the Special Containment Procedures appear to have Description elements mixed in
• Various minor formatting issues, such as "SCP 4924" instead of the correct "SCP-4924"
• Aspects of SCP-4924 and SCP-4924-1 are mixed randomly into the same paragraph, rather than being in their own respective paragraphs
• Phrases such as "When investigating, it was found that these bodies had usually been dead for up to 75 years. All from murder," lack clinical, scientific tones and are just vague

Beyond those issues, several questions are raise or left unanswered by the article, including:

• How did the Foundation discover SCP-4924 and get it into a containment chamber underground?
• If SCP-4924 is unable to pass through biological matter, why construct its chamber out of non-biological materials, and how does being underground prevent it from escaping?
• SCP-4924-1's bodies in SCP-4924 are described as simply having been "Murdered." What was the method of execution, and are there records of bodies found in the front seat?

In your next draft, which I suggest running by the Drafts and Critiques forum after the article has answered some of the above questions and rectified the errors mentioned above.

In my personal opinion, I would recommend removing SCP-4924-1's ability to kill with only a look and replace it with a different ability that doesn't immediately kill but can still be dangerous.

I believe that with effort and cleaning up this SCP has potentially to maintain a spot on the mainlist. Good luck!

BeezerGeezer

+ show block

the thought of a skeleton just rolling up on a bunch people in a limo like some kind of anomalous drive-by shooting made me laugh quite a bit

LordSpy

+ show block

Yup. Limo spooky scary skeleton is hilarious as imagery. I don't think that's what the author was aiming as far reactions go, but it did give me a bit of extra enjoyment from an otherwise bland article.

---

SCP-3638 is a tree (Quercus lyrata, or Overcup Oak) that transforms nearby man-made objects into various types of flora. Subjects near SCP-3638 report feeling relaxed, comparing it to "taking a warm bath" or "petting a soft animal." When any human comes into contact with SCP-3638, they slowly start becoming covered with thick vines of many flora organisms, -14 and three staff votes.

Feedback ported:

NetherGranite

+ show block

I really like how developed this SCP was, but I feel that the idea itself was a little bland. While this probably would have passed in the early days of this website, it feels like the standard has risen quite a bit. This SCP would have a much better chance if there were a twist of some kind, it presented a danger of disturbingly large magnitude, etc.

LordSpy

+ show block

This really does nothing, narratively speaking, beyond a "man-eating plant" that lures people with relaxation. Neither the test log nor the recovery log tells us absolutely anything new that we didn't know based on the description. It's fundamentally boring as a result.

Finally, there is no reason for this entire document to be of such secrecy as the collapsible would imply. It's not an infohazard nor is it so critical that the Foundation is at risk if any information on it got out.

Re: Deletions 56: It's so infinite that its flavor text says,

Zyn 05 Jan 2019 22:41

SCP-4278 is a male dog that has the look of a one year old husky breed. However, SCP-4278’s age is indeterminate, this is because it has not shown any signs of aging. It has shown to be more intelligent then basic dogs. SCP-4278 also defecates and urinates three times as fast as the average dog for an anomalous reason, however, it still eats and drinks the same amount as a normal dog, -23 and three staff votes.

Feedback ported:

NetherGranite

+ show block

Nice job writing an SCP! For me, the idea is interesting, but the article is draft quality; there are typos here and there, and the wording is a bit awkward at times. Also, I have to warn you that this will most likely not be received well; the standard for SCPs has risen quite a bit over the years, and this idea may not be complex enough to survive unless you can come up with something that makes it particularly interesting, e.g. a twist, disturbing implications, canonical significance, etc.

LordSpy

+ show block

This quickly enters overkill territory. It starts out workable if a tad bit derivative (there's plenty of other random human body parts generators), but when you throw in diseases (Poorly researched ones at that, given how HIV can be transmitted by several non-sexual means.), then it loses any potential.

Lantern2814

+ show block

Perhaps you could do a spin on this- like a note of irresponsible pet owners who don't clean up after their animal?

---

SCP-4316 is a humanoid, with features of a 26 year old male. SCP-4316 has crimson skin and on occasion can be seen with wings. The exact speed of SCP-4316 is currently unknown. SCP-4316 was found in the U.S state of [DATA EXPUNGED]. SCP-4316s most iconic features is his bow and arrows, which are impossible to take off it’s body. Also note that SCP-4316 never seems to run of Arrows, -23 and three staff votes.

Feedback ported:

LordSpy

+ show block

The anomaly itself is fairly weak, being merely a cupid that causes people to turn violent, and after that you really don't do anything more with it. The log itself is poorly formatted and does not provide any good development.

Re: Deletions 56: It's so infinite that its flavor text says,

Zyn 06 Jan 2019 07:53

SCP-4234 appears to be invisible, but thermal exams show that it looks like a human male, and about 8ft tall. It killed by snapping the neck, pulling a weapon out of nowhere, and it can also somehow explode a victim. It can also teleport. SCP-4234 will go for a victim as soon as it can sense it. It somehow has perfect hearing and sight, and smell, -22 and three staff votes.

Feedback ported:

Wils

+ show block

This is borderline incoherent -

SCP-4234 must be kept in a 7mx7mx7mx7m

1. That's 4 dimensions… 2. 7m X 7m X 7m X 7m what? Box? Biscuit tin?

inside of a soundproof airtight silver cube, at all times (In HCZ).

Why silver? What's a HCZ?

A monthly check for confirmation of SCP-4234 being in containment must happen.

Why only once a month?

3 secret cameras must be inside the containment chamber for surveillance, and yes 3 because SCP-4234 might destroy a camera,

"And yes 3" sounds very unclinical

TBH I couldn't really get past those to even give the rest of course the article a chance. It's my opinion (only opinion, mind) that the first paragraph will kill your article completely).

While not under testing, repairs

Ok that sentence just ends with no conclusion…

LordSpy

+ show block

This is incredibly boring. It's nothing but a super-mega dangerous dude who kills for no apparent reason. Let's use SCP-106 as a point of comparison: sure it's also a dangerous humanoid whose main purpose seems to be sadism. The thing is: that's not why the article works. The main hook there is the extreme complexity of the procedures that the Foundation has been forced into developing in order to contain it.

---

SCP-3867 is 7 feet tall, wears a dusty, black, and ripped suit. Has black eyes with no pupils, always appears to be smiling, baring it's razor sharp teeth which are stained with a liquid similar to blood. Arms and legs are 3 feet long. 1 foot long and blood stained fingers, wears a withered top hat, and always carries a wooden cane with him. SCP-3867's movements are extremely fast but often trips on nothing, -20 and three staff votes.

Feedback ported:

Dr Fujimura

+ show block

Politely, there is no hook to this story at all. Here's a thing that just kills people because it can. It doesn't seem to have any motivations, doesn't seem to have any weaknesses or rules, and what little personality we see through the interview log is quickly swept away.

It looks like you cold posted this. This really needs to spend some time on the forum getting feedback and being developed.

LordSpy

+ show block

(regarding comment "All you did was copy that thing from SCP Illustrated, and even then, it still wasn't that good.")

Evidence: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=blZZKmTHuGQ

If this was alone I could give them the benefit of the doubt that they were the original author, but based on their multiple other low-effort coldposts and the behavior around them, I highly suspect they're nothing than a run of the mill a troll.

---

SCP-3482 is the designation for a pair of reading glasses discovered in 1947 by Dr. Ricen Heardbach of Sweden while exploring an outdoor market. When worn SCP-3482 gives the wearer the ability to locate and find any item in existence including other SCPs. However the user must have already come in to contact with the item or something very similar to the item they are searching for, -16 and three staff votes.

Feedback ported:

Crashington

+ show block

Just so this is not deleted without any feedback: This is filled with formatting and grammatical errors and the idea is neither very original (Glasses that make you aware where things are) nor is anything interesting done with it.

---

SCP-4124 appears to have no form of its own. SCP-4124 either takes the form of another organism, or makes its own form combining 2 or more organisms. Also, SCP-4124 can place a small section of itself on an organism to assimilate and control it. Instances of this are to be referred to as SCP-4124-1 (initial organism), SCP-4124-2, SCP-4124-3, and so on. Assimilation can occur immediately after contact of cells, -14 and three staff votes.

Feedback ported:

lie544

+ show block

In your description, you have a whole part that goes over how the brain can regenerate, but you could just delete that whole section and it would be fine. You could go in depth about how long an organism takes to assimilate and what happens during that time instead of the brain part. You could start it with "Due to SCP-4124's properties no organic material may enter its containment unless authorized my personnel with level 3 clearance. Should any organism enter SCP-4124's containment…"

canaryfarmer

+ show block

So you spend all this time describing how this thing assimilates things and regenerates if needed. However, as far as I'm concerned at least, there's nothing that elicits any kind of emotion. Imaginary creatures that assimilate others, or regenerate from massive wounds easily are nothing new, and since that's all this entry is, with no other story or interesting angle, it just…exists in a narrative vacuum. Describing a creature that simply does something anomalously better than a regular creature with no other hook is going to be at the end of the day, a very bland article.

---

SCP-4071 was founded scaling pripyat apartment block Альфа 20.6 km away from the chernobyl disaster 16 years earlier. The appearance of SCP-4071 is that of a arachnid, its four (4) severely long legs reaching approximately 6-7 metres in length. The subjects four (4) legs have very little muscle mass and 15-20 cm in-grown nails naturally pointed, -13 and three staff votes.

Feedback ported:

Dr Fujimura

+ show block

The thing that bothers me most about this article: incisors are for ripping and tearing and are usually sharp and pointy. Think "canine" teeth. And molars are broad, flat, kind of sort of square looking with rounded corners. These are for grinding.

Are you intending the blood to completely replace this things nutrition on a purely biological level? Or are you going for something more supernatural and mysterious? Because if you want to go purely biologically, a person might need 10-12 gallons a day to get enough nutrients from blood to live. Let alone some supercow.

Overall this is a big no from me, it's just way too raw. This is a thing that kills people because. You should take this to the drawing board and work in some more layers to the mystery.

LordSpy

+ show block

Using Chernobyl as a magical source of anomalies is usually lazy, and while this is not the worst thing to ever use it, it still feel gratuitous.

The creature itself is kind of boring, if we're being perfectly honest. It's visually somewhat appealing (albeit a bit derivative), but that is not really enough to make the article itself a good read. Sometimes monsters are unique enough that their very existence is enough to justify them, but much more often you need to tell a story directly or indirectly to get a reaction out of the reader.

P.S. Using random images of "monsters" as the basis for your articles is usually not the best idea, at least not if you are not going to flesh out said concept with something of your own.

---

SCP 4472 is a gaseous, sentient entity of extra-terrestrial origin that most closely resembles a teal coloured vapour trail. SCP 4472 is currently located beside Lake ██████ within the African nation of █████. The nearby remote village of ████████ is closely linked with the entity as the ancestors of the residents are the ones who originally defeated and contained SCP 4472, -12 and three staff votes.

---

SCP-4796 appears to be a semi-transparent four dimensional black 12x12 cm cube at which lengths one can see the "inside" of SCP-4796. When a subject makes eye contact within one foot of SCP-4796, the subject, hereafter SCP-4796-1, will become increasingly fatigued. Brain functions of SCP-4796-1 will slow and, within one minute, all neural activity will cease. Upon total brain death, SCP-4796 will begin to rotate, -12 and three staff votes.

Re: Deletions 56: It's so infinite that its flavor text says,

Zyn 06 Jan 2019 09:27

SCP-4152 also the “Flash Camera” is a standup camera resembling a 1940's model. SCP-4152 is estimated to be 2.1 meters tall. In the Containment Zone there is a 2x4m line square box, if you stand in it, the camera will take a photo of you without anyone controlling it. None of the photos SCP-4152 has taken have been seen, attempts to recover it has resulted in failure due to [DATA EXPUNGED], improper self-delete, cleared by me at -13 with ARD witnessing.

Feedback ported:

NetherGranite

+ show block

While the idea is reasonably original in its specificity, it's just a tad bit bland. Overall, you have portrayed the SCP as disturbing because it kills people in gross ways; there is no other depth to it. While this may have passed in the early days of the website, it seems that the standard has risen quite a bit, so I doubt this SCP will be received well by the community unfortunately. It is refreshing, however, that you at least developed it reasonably. I do have a comment on the tone:

Dr. ██████: You will enter the red lined box right now!

D-2873: Why?

Dr. ██████: Just do it!

Researchers do not get frustrated with their test subjects; they are clinical and calculating. When test subjects do not behave, they are firmly given warnings of consequences.

Re: Deletions 56: It's so infinite that its flavor text says,

A Random Day 06 Jan 2019 23:43

SCP-4473 summarily deleted following a failed attempt at self-deletion by its author. Witnessed by taylor_itkin.

Re: Deletions 56: It's so infinite that its flavor text says,

Zyn 07 Jan 2019 05:28

SCP-3578 Is a 3 meter long unbreakable 3D board. The first half meter is nothing but a green military base with a sign saying "Green" on the side. The next meter is a tight jungle. After that the next meter is a dessert with small mounts and lakes. Then the last half meter is a sand colored military base with the sign "Dessert" Written on the side. It's normal that gunshots, explosions and yells are heard from the board about 1 or 2 hours every day, -19 and three staff votes.

Feedback ported:

SJolene

+ show block

Grammar and clinical tone are poor, and you've committed the cardinal sin of redacting the containment procedures. Did you ask for feedback on this before posting it?

dankaar

+ show block

explosion proof material

No such thing exists. Explosions aren't the same thing as bullets. A nuke going off is an explosion. Popcorn popping is also an explosion. A paper bag can withstand the forces involved when a popcorn pops. The same bag won't stop a nuclear bomb.

It's not the materials that are explosion proof, it's the combination of materials and how they are built that makes something resistant to explosions. Even then, they can only withstand a certain amont of explosive force before they fail.

Sarsam133

+ show block

The description of the item was very hard for me to picture. I could only understand the description after reading the rest of the entry. The grammar was a bit sloppy as well. Have someone look over your post before posting.

LordSpy

+ show block

Why didn't they just stuff each army on a separate box? I mean, overall "living toy soldiers" isn't a great idea to start with, but it could at least get improved if the execution didn't seem so bland. Remember, the Foundation itself and its efforts for containment are also potential narrative elements.

---

SCP-4072 is a 2 meter bipedal humanoid capable of speech which resembles a wooden doll. The material the specimen is carved from is made of ████████████. (Note: Carving limbs is no longer allowed due to an incident. See log 72) When SCP-4072 writes a piece of music with lyrics, the song becomes reality in a matter of ██ hours. SCP-4072 turns all metal within a 3 meter radius to rust, -17 and three staff votes.

Feedback ported:

TheMightyMcB

+ show block

bipedal humanoid

Being humanoid implies that it is bipedal. You should only point out how many legs it stands on if the humanoid is not bipedal

---

SCP-3583-2 is a 305 x 229 x 152mm cardboard box tightly sealed at the top with multiple layers of duct tape. It has little to no markings, only a scratched off unidentifiable logo, a “#2” written in marker pen on the side and a sticky label reading “Do not open under any circumstances”, and appears to be in good condition. SCP-3583-1 was, as far as we know, identical, except it said "#1" instead of "#2", -17 and three staff votes.

Feedback ported:

LordSpy

+ show block

There are (at least) two successful iterations of "is this anomalous or not" concept already on the site, and various others have been submitted. This one feels too on the nose. I get you want to convey a credible threat, but your chosen method feels somewhat lazy with it just looking like something else which was an anomalous bomb.

You could have also tried to spice this up by giving it some interesting containment procedures or trying to explain how these got into Foundation custody, though that's just some wild brainstorming.

---

SCP-4154 is an anomaly manifesting in the form of a 27 year old individual, vaguely resembling a Japanese male. At this time, SCP-4154 has yet to pose a threat to any Foundation personnel or civilians. However, due to its sapient status, it is to be classified as Euclid until further research is conducted into its mental status, -16 and three staff votes.

Feedback ported:

RockTeethMothEyes

+ show block

As fun and lovely the reference video is, this suffers from poor execution and poor clinical tone (that first footnote being a prime example). Worst of all, the anomaly is boring.

Did you get your concept checked in the Ideas & Brainstorming forums? It is typically the first step you should take when creating an article, barring the How-To-Write An SCP guide.

Crashington

+ show block

Did you say anywhere THAT it manifests? You say what it does when it manifests at placesbut never state that is that the ability to (i am guessing) teleport.
Maybe its just me but thats bothering me.

---

SCP-4780 is a standard issue [REDACTED] branded box cutter, measuring 10.16 centimeters when fully extended. The blade is incredibly sharp, although the steel alloy it is made of is not unusual in any way. Anyone who hasn’t experienced or isn’t currently experiencing suicidal thoughts can hold SCP-4780 with no ill effects. However, if anyone who has experienced or is currently experiencing suicidal thoughts touches SCP-4780 for more than 3 seconds, either the blade or handle, they will try to kill themselves, -15 and three staff votes.

Feedback ported:

NetherGranite

+ show block

Nice job writing an SCP! While this idea is interesting, it's a little under-developed, and objects that make people suicidal have been done before in one way or another. As a result, the community will most likely not receive it too well unless it has some sort of catch, twist, or something else that makes it particularly stand out among other similar SCPs. Also, the article has a few typos in it, and it needs some format work. There are official feedback forums where you can post drafts of your SCP and get feedback; I'd recommend posting there first if you haven't already. I can almost confidently tell you that your SCP will not be received well by the community since it is largely draft quality.

Zyn

+ show block

Per your forum history, this is the only forum thread you had: http://www.scp-wiki.net/forum/t-9770014/2-scp-ideas-and-sandbox-link

You were told "So you know, the "it forces you to hurt yourself" approach isn't particularly interesting on its own anymore, given how many times SCPs with that effect have been written." and additional details in the same vein.

---

SCP-4081 are two objects classified as SCP-4081-1 and SCP-4081-2. SCP-4081-1 is a black/grey fedora made out of an unknown material that is very resilient against fire, cuts and brute force. SCP-4081-2 is a knife 30 cm long and 3 kg in weight. SCP-4081-2 is made of an unknown material that seems to be indestructible. When These two objects are united with a photo of a person all three objects will disappear when out of a line of sight, -15 and three staff votes.

---

SCP-4026 is a group of 81 7 Oak trees2 located in ██████ Park in the small town of ███████, PA. During the night (approximately 7:00 p.m. to 8:00 a.m., though it does vary), instances of SCP-4026 start exhibiting sentience and the ability to walk around █████ Park. While this is happening, instances of SCP-4026 become incredibly territorial and aggressive to any person in the vicinity, attacking them with their branches, -13 and three staff votes. Researcher Helms has volunteered a rewrite.

Feedback ported:

themingowman

+ show block

This article is simply just a start. That's it. Like the idea and photo but this is just series 1 tier level of writing. "Trees that walk. Where did they come from?" Is just not very captivating. It was a good idea to get an idea on Reddit, but the fact of the matter is, you should really come HERE to the FORUMS before posting. ALWAYS.

I don't think this article is going to stay on the mainlist, but all it needs is some tweaking.

LordSpy

+ show block

Meh

There's not really anything wrong with it, but you barely do anything with it beyond merely "they're walking trees". The removal from the park apparently killing one of them is a minor development, just not one that elevates it to new heights.

---

SCP-3734 is a small transistor radio of unknown make or model, constructed of a red-colored plastic with a gold-colored disc used to adjust tuning. It contains a small plastic wheel on the side of the device to adjust volume, and a 3.5mm jack to output sound to other devices, such as headphones. Testing has revealed that any transmissions received on SCP-3734 cannot be recorded onto any formats newer than the compact cassette, -11 and three staff votes.

Feedback ported:

Wydness

+ show block

The level of detail was well thought out, but the skip itself was kinda boring and seemed too fast, especially with the sudden O5 segment at the end. I think this could have been creepy if there wasn't such an emphasis on making it so threatening.

Taffeta

+ show block

The conceit of this one isn't anything particularly inspiring — a radio that tells the future is at least more interesting than one which tells the past because we don't already know what happened — but the fact that the article feels it's necessary to explain itself to us despite a plodding list of expository examples a few paragraphs prior is really the icing on the cake here.

EOCTO

+ show block

It's a good idea, but I think it still needs a bit of work.
For example:
-"when he closed a broadcast" - I think the broadcaster 'Charlie' should also have SCP designation, like, for example, SCP-3734-C. Then you wouldn't have to use he.
-"of said broadcasts" I feel like 'said' sounds a bit strange here when you could've just said 'the broadcasts'
-"Class B amnestics were administrated to several employees" I feel like there was a missed opportunity for and interview log here since the foundation wound want to know where the store got the radio from.
-"damage any newer recording medium upon attempts to record onto it." Could you give an example of what happens?

Overall good concept but just needs a bit of editing.

Re: Deletions 56: It's so infinite that its flavor text says,

Zyn 07 Jan 2019 07:30

Class-thermeal

Speshal containment prosegers:
Because this scp was (and still is) a level4 acsess reacercher before he was classed as an scp he has been pramited to have free rome of sight 19, he is to be fallowed by no less thean 1 level 4 gard, if scp 4082 is to loose his gard and atemped to leave the sight he is to be traqulised and trancported back to his office. If at eany point there is a containment breach scp 4082 is to be alerted imediatly.

Discripshon:
Scp 4082 is a 6 foot 7 inch in hight and waise as much as a hethy adolt, he is a class 4 senyer reasercher emploide by the scp fondashon on the [redaced] of [redacted]18 before he was classed as an scp. He is aproxamatly 18 years of age but has not yet been comfermed. Scp 4082 is able to stop a euclid level scp ded in its tracks with a simple hand jescher, there are some stetbacs to this thogh, scp4082 can not hold a euclid scp forever there is aproxamatly about 40 seconsd time stamp for his abilaty maby more or less depending on what tipe of sichuashon he is in,

Summarily deleted at -11 for trolling, thedeadlymoose witnessing.

page 1 of 12123...1112next »