Noting that the above draft was posted to the mainsite and later deleted, but did receive a rather substantial response. For records-keeping, the deletion notice (with the ported feedback) is here:
http://www.scp-wiki.net/forum/t-8938724/deletions-55:mama-said-don-t-give-up-it-s-a-little-complicat#post-4098198
Author, out of curiosity, did you happen to get the core concept checked in the Ideas and Brainstorming forum before drafting the full article? I think that's the first step to be taken here, given that you have a lot of details present in the draft (leading to wall of text description paragraphs) that are kind of an immediate reader turn-away. There are also a lot of little errors present, like not correctly capitalizing Site names, not writing out "third-degree burn" as opposed to "3rd degree burn", using "[CLASSIFIED]" as a censor marker as opposed to [REDACTED] (which is the standard on the site, unless the classified "barrier" can be lifted with a collapsible), and so on. Generally, the number (#) numeration is used for extreme precision measurements that can be fatal if misinterpreted, like drug prescriptions. Alternatively, it's for legal reasons to avoid ambiguity. You don't need to do that with easy to count whole numbers. Also, the Foundation only uses metric measurements, so no gallons.
Also, why is this thing Keter class if the containment is so short and straightforward?
I personally had a hard time suspending disbelief given that the anomaly seems almost tailor-made just to mess with the Foundation, from the overly inconvenient spontaneous manifestation in a Foundation site, to gradually getting more difficult to contain… because? And also killing a researcher (why was a researcher used for the test instead of a D-Class?), and then getting to the point where the O5 Councilmembers (not "05 council") need to be involved and stopping the water is the "top priority". It just seems increasingly more annoying to deal with… just because there needs to be drama?
I recommend getting the concept polished up first, and then figuring out at that stage which parts you can keep and which you can trim out. Then you can go back to the draft and make requisite fixes.
