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I like it, the item and its effects are something I can imagine 🌙🌙🌙 doing. However, I'm tempted to withhold an upvote for some minor issues that are bugging me.
[DATA EXPUNGED], Missouri
This seems more like it would be redacted over being expunged. What's so hazardous about the name of a place in Missouri?
SCP-4337 Testing Log (entry 1 of 1):
The weird heading bugs me. I think "Testing Log:" like the other sections looks better.
Director Naismith
I don't really understand why the Site Director is using an anomaly to kill a D-class, but I'm willing to overlook this one.
Thanks for the notes. Edits have been made accordingly.
I'm not a programmer, so I don't know what the [%fieldvar]'s means. Because of that, I'm unsure how to vote.
You don't have to. It's poking fun at them using an automatically generated email response which is broken for some reason.
I feel as if this is beating a dead thread, But that technically qualifies as a Bowie knife.
I mean, you could call this a combat knife, but that seems too vague of a description, at least if you're looking at this from the Foundation's point of view. Given its reputed total length of 38 cm, and the inclusion of a clip-point, straight cross-guard, and "Spanish Notch" at the base of the blade, it is a mid-length Bowie Knife.
"The only thing we have to fear is fear itself… and spiders." - FDR, probably
I'll admit — this does nothing for me. This is mostly because I don't necessarily get what's going on. And I don't believe I can attribute that lack of understanding to my failure as a reader; instead, I think the anomaly in question is poorly described.
Description
SCP-4337 is a fixed-blade combat knife, 38 cm in length. A sand-engraved decal of three crescent moons is present on either side of the blade.
A superficial description of the object is fine,
Through Procedure 10-Inti, SCP-4337 can cause an e-mailed form letter to appear in the inbox of the surviving participant after two hours.
but this isn't. Why isn't Procedure 10-Inti explained upfront? Who is the1 surviving participant, and of what action?
Due to the triple-crescent motif being analogous to other objects in Foundation custody (including SCP-3319 and SCP-3922)
I'm fine with a connection to the other Three Moons anomalies.2 But you plug the GOI before telling the reader what the knife actually does, and I think that's insufficient.
Recovery Log
On 12/21/2018, the location of the original instance of SCP-4337 was relayed to the Foundation in an e-mail from SCP-2578-D, on the grounds that the object's original owners were "senile cultists" that had been "using the device to make libelous claims."
I think it's poor form to use another article to explain how this one was found.3 At the very least, you should provide brief context into what SCP-2578 is before explaining how it's related. Additionally,
the location of the original instance
the wording implies there is more than one instance, contrary to the Description.
Documents recovered alongside SCP-4337 led to the formation of Procedure 10-Inti:
1. One D-class subject ("Participant") is to be given a question by a second party ("Celebrant")
2. Immediately after, the celebrant is to stab the participant in the heart.
Okay, so when you ask a question and stab someone in the heart with a knife, the answer is sent via e-mail to the participant. That's an interesting anomaly, but why does it take 5 description paragraphs to explain that? And why do D-Class personnel have e-mail addresses?
Addendum
Thaumiel classification revoked with vehemence. 10-Inti testing is heretofore relegated only to low-priority questions. - Director Naismith
Why was it Thaumiel in the first place? It exchanges a person's life with an answer to a question. And based on the automated e-mail received via test log, the questions aren't even answered properly.4 In fact, the "answer" brings up even more questions.
Further, trading someone's life for the answer to a low-priority question — and not, say, an important one — is ridiculous, even ignoring the (in my opinion) poor lolFoundation note-at-the-end/D-Class termination tropes.
I can appreciate a Three Moons anomaly because I dig the light-hearted and whimsical nature of it. But I think this article neither stands alone nor expands on the Three Moons lore, despite leaning on it so heavily. I understand this article was posted nearly 6 months ago and had a decent reception, but I don't think it works in its current state.
Most of the things you were annoyed with are just the storytelling mechanisms the author chose to use (they don’t need to give everything right away), but I agree with your main point, this doesn’t add anything to the Three Moons lore.
Imagine playing a round of 2fort and some aussie mother fucker starts swinging this bad boy at you.
This doesn't really do much for me. A combination of confusing wording, confusing structure, and confusing actions undertaken by the characters makes me downvote this article.
If YoU dOnT dO tHis cORRecTLY, The SCARy MonsTER wiLL KILL YOU!!!111!!!11
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