Author, per the Draft Forum Guidelines, you're only supposed to ask for feedback on one draft per thread. Otherwise, the discussion can get muddled and you're effectively asking for twice as much as any other author with a thread here.
So far as the drafts go, you definitely should have gotten the base concepts checked in the Ideas and Brainstorming forum first.
So you know, the "it forces you to hurt yourself" approach isn't particularly interesting on its own anymore, given how many times SCPs with that effect have been written. Take a look at the articles tagged with "compulsion". Furthermore, an SCP object's effect forcing someone to do something tends to be a bit of a lame narrative, since things are more interesting if there's a struggle involved, and/or if the people instead do terrible things of their own volition rather than just because the author needs them to for the story to work. Consider reading through the further discussion on the narrative issues of compulsion and addiction effects.
For the second item, it follows the pretty generic "random output" formula, which tends to be seen as kind of lazy because of the lack of consistency implying an overarching theme or "bigger picture". If the effects are really random, then it's effectively the same as any sort of magic item that just does random stuff, similar to the Wand of Wonder in Dungeons and Dragons.
I suggest reading over this essay on common SCP pitfalls to get an idea of what elements to avoid putting in an SCP article, as well as this new essay on how to approach classic overdone SCP premises.
Writing-wise… you need to do a lot of basic fixing to make your drafts more appealing to readers. Make sure you put a line space between each paragraph, use correct punctuation (note the difference between semicolons and colons), trim out fluff details that don't contribute much to interest the reader or help them understand the primary anomaly, and write more streamlined containment procedures. ( I recommend reading this guide on containment to get a feel for how to write more logical, resource-conserving procedures.)
Definitely get the ideas revised and checked in Ideas and Brainstorming first.
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