While typo hunting there were bits I didn't have simple solutions to.
When Septima is communing, she says "If anything this would help regain my power." I don't know whether you should say "help me regain" because "me" bugs me that way. You could say "help recover" which is good, but I have to ask first to change intent that way. Recover is so close to regain that the way it is is sort of acceptable too. Can author pick?
Also, when the damaged way monster faces Sigguros it says it is "watching at" her and I kind of like having "at" involved because it sounds aggressive, but it's not (-ish) grammatically correct. So I feel like taking the "at" out or using a verb that works with "at" would regardless end up changing the intent behind the words no matter which option I choose.
