Anonymous (24.207.56.x) 25 Sep 2008 23:17
How can she lift 2.5t with her metal limbs? They are still attached to flesh and bone, and that join should fail long before she manages to lift that mass.
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Anonymous (24.207.56.x) 25 Sep 2008 23:17
For all intents and purposes, it is an entire extra skeleton, extending over her entire skeletal structure. It's just the places it can poke out are at the scars.
Thanks for pointing that out though. I didn't actually think of that when I was writing, so I've fixed it.
This is a neat writeup, but why does the girl's fear of doctors make research so difficult? The Foundation is not known to be soft-hearted. One would think they'd pump her full of tranquilizers, buckle her into some extra-heavy restraints, and get to studying while she's unconscious.
The limbs tend to act autonomously sometimes. And they don't seem to be effected all that much by her state of consciousness.
So…. yeah, best to leave sleeping dogs lie, and try and work her problems out, THEN do what you said when she's not expecting it.
Okay, pet peeve time. Kilograms are units of mass, not weight, not force, and not pressure.
If you're looking at 4000 pounds of force, the metric equivalent is about 17,800 newtons. (We can talk about significant digits another time) Pressure would be pounds per square inch, with the metric equivalent being pascals. Mike Tyson had a punch of about 1800 PSI when he was in top shape, which would be 12.4 MPa
Now if the lady is punching at 4000 PSI (which seems likely from the description), then her blows would be measured at 27.6 MPa and she'd end up shattering bones and probably killing people.
Is that what you meant to say?
Edit: I went ahead and corrected it. Figured it was a minor touch up for accuracy.
Minor nitpick from me - "titanium alloy polymer" is one buzzword too many. Metals and metal alloys do not form polymer chains. It's not unheard of for a polymer or other complex organic molecule to incorporate one or more metallic atoms, but this also does not grant them metallic properties. Also, "malleable" refers to an ability to be plastically (i.e. permanently) deformed, which would cause rapid fatigue of any structure (how many times can you bend a paperclip back and forth before it breaks?).
My suggestion would be to make the extra skeleton out of carbon nanofibers, since those are not only highly durable but also capable of acting as conductors or semiconductors, thus increasing the plausibility of both neural control and autonomous action. If you want to keep it metallic, then try something like a "novel titanium-based superalloy". Also, replace "malleable" with "elastic".
Carbon nanofibers would be interesting, although that raises another question. From what literature I was able to get my hands on, nanofibers would be toxic. So, there would be the matter of how she lives with it.
Amusing, no?
Alright. Thanks for picking that up for me. I rather dislike inconsistencies in my own stuff. But the malleable thing seems to be entirely subjective, so I think I'll be keeping it that way.
Fair enough, although you might want to consider going through it with a fine-toothed comb for grammar. I saw a run on sentence near the end that would have made the baby Jesus cry, and He spoke Aramaic. I groove to the idea of this pretty well, but… ugh. Like the deal with mass and pressure, that throws me right out of the story and brings on the raeg. <grin>
Heh. Sorry, I'm more of a prose writer than anything else, so things like this slip through the cracks.
The idea of a test subject from some sort of enhancement procedure gone wrong is not original, nor is this executed well, in my opinion.
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Down to +3; a good time to start brainstorming.
Clearly, the precise mechanics of her enhancements don't matter here. What matters is what the enhancement has done to her, to the impoverished Chinese woman from a tiny village.
Something that might be interesting would be if she has deliberately deafened herself — ramming sharp objects into her eardrums — so as to not be able to hear orders or trigger phrases.
"Her family is not important enough to have a family name" - that strikes me as somewhat off, based on what I know of Chinese culture. In fact, based on how we treat humanoid SCPs in general, her name shouldn't be included in the article at all. It'd be interesting if we can't find any evidence that her village ever existed, also. The location of the village was flooded by the Three Gorges Dam, but for all the other villages that met that fate, there's at least evidence that the village existed in the past.
Hmmm… the reason we don't just anesthetize her from a distance is that, if she loses consciousness for any reason other than natural sleep, the enhancements go into defense mode.
Something else is that, if she's 29, that's a little too physically attractive. Let's put her into her 50s. (This would also have some interesting historical consequences — think 'Great Leap Forward…)
I'd definitely like to see some of these changes. Rereading the post I realized that I was already *imagining* her in her 50s, even though 29 is the age provided. I initially downvoted over some of the iffy historial/containment details, but it wouldn't take a radical rewrite for this to be worth a +1.
Righto, Voct is allowed to rewrite the thing. Go crazy dude.
Everything is decent but the Additional Notes, which look like they'll be pretty hard to salvage.
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