Between Shelves / Discussion

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rumetzen 07 Jul 2014 20:14

The Ruler's Back.

Second Black Queen tale, sequel to Going Out of Book. Expect a whole influx of stuff soon.

Dr Reach 08 Jul 2014 13:10

This is cool. :3

two typos

CCKinnison 18 Nov 2014 22:19

…not sure if the wiki's rules on typos apply to tales, so I'll just note them here.

last line of dialogue: “You're lucky. L.S doesn't accept often accept people so soon. My name is Amanda. I'd like to welcome you to the Serpent's Tooth.”

And a few paragraphs up from that:
It was 45 minutes before they stopped, in a shelf that look like every other (MENDACITY, read the plaque on the side). Meredith knelt down and rapped against the rug three times. She stood, took five steps back, and stopped twice. Then she took four steps to the left and stomped another six times.

I think that word should be "stomped".

Other than those, love the story, heading on to part 3. ;)

Basicide 24 Mar 2016 19:27

Overall, a very well done tale. My only suggestion would be applying some kind of styling to the sand entity's dialogue for clarity.