SCP-2756 / Discussion

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First Things First

Alan Corbie 13 May 2014 07:40

I would like to thank the guys on chat for reviewing this countless times, and the general community for giving grew help on the forums.

Thanks for helping me pull this through.

Accelerando 13 May 2014 08:16

A nice take on a horrifying mutational disease. It was sounding like 610 for a bit, but thankfully it didn't go down the same path.

Is there supposed to be a paragraph break at the mention of SCP-2756-B?

Edit: changing to novote, I was relived that there wasn't another mediocre article before looking at the details

Last edited on 14 May 2014 20:48 by Accelerando Show more

Alan Corbie 13 May 2014 08:25

Is there supposed to be a paragraph break at the mention of SCP-2756-B?

Should there be? Because I'll fix that if needed.

Amabio 13 May 2014 09:32

I believe that would be appropriate, as you are transitioning from one idea to another in a block of text.

weizhong 13 May 2014 10:20

The overall effect is very weak, but I do quite like the direction that you took in the interview. It's not quite there for a novote or upvote, but it was a nice little spin.

A Random Day 13 May 2014 11:22

I like it. The town is just trying to live as normally as they can with horrible mutations.

It actively foreshadows what could happen should the Foundation ever lose containment of one of their more… esoteric items.

Po-ta-to 13 May 2014 12:01

So Site██ is also full of mutated researchers and stuff?
I like it.

Japjer 13 May 2014 12:28

I certainly don't dislike it - the idea of everyone having horrific mutations and just trying to live with them is actually kind of sweet, in a weird way. I can't quite put my finger on what it is, but there's just something that's keeping me from happily upvoting this one. You've got my +1, but I was tentative to do it.

Also, you should remove the black boxes on the description. Personnel should be able to read the containment details and know exactly what needs to be done; as it stands now no one will have any idea as to what site anything should be sent to. Overall you want to avoid redaction, expungement, and black boxing anything in the containment procedures, as that's the information any site personnel can access in an emergency. There's no help on attempting to contain something if you can't see how you're supposed to do it.

dankaar 13 May 2014 20:33

Site/area designations are the only thing that's OK to censor in the Containment Procedures. If you're working with the SCP, you already know what site it is located at.

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Devereaux 13 May 2014 12:49

I really like where you went with the interview, but I found the description and to some degree, the item kind of weak. This is a great first attempt, and you should be proud of it, but I found myself disinterested while reading the description, so I novoted.

Still, good job.

HammerMaiden 13 May 2014 15:33

It's a little bit too flat and obvious for me to upvote, but it's solid. I wouldn't want it gone.

+1

Edit: Erm… I mean 0. Man, where is my head?

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dierubikdie 13 May 2014 19:09

This started out reminding me too much of the Flesh That Hates, but I like the direction it went. It horribly mutates people, but not in a harmful way. It just looks gross.

I like the last part of the interview, when he talks about the kids. They just go about their lives like it's been like this forever. Creepstown.

+1

dankaar 13 May 2014 20:44

I'd suggest you move the sentence stating what 2756-B is to the paragraph where you talk about it. I initially downvoted because I couldn't figure out what 2765-B was at first.

+1 otherwise.

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