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Another GRU-P space skip. Wee.

Dr Reach 07 May 2014 12:11

Credits!

Djoric, Weizhong, SoullessSingularity, Fantem and AndarielHalo for their private messages with regards to the original draft, which I was too coward to put in the Draft forums for a while. Also, to Eskobar, who helped me with the almost finished draft. And to Vlank; her support to the original version (in Spanish) made this happen.

Gracias. : )

Edit: Oh, this was modified to fit Djoric's Random Character Generator Challenge. It isn't a tale, granted, but part of the characterization was sort of a consequence of the word "peculiar" and its meaning.

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Re: Another GRU-P space skip. Wee.

RJB_R 07 May 2014 12:21

Is this a translation from SCP-ES?

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Whether you like it or not, history is on our side. We will bury you!

Re: Another GRU-P space skip. Wee.

Dr Reach 07 May 2014 12:24

Nope. I planned to write it in Spanish and publish it there, but I chose to write it in English. I have other skips in the SCP-ES series (026, 053, 021 and 067) but this is in English only.

_{Edit: (Also, thanks for your kind words. I'm a bit overexcited right now.)}

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(account deleted) 07 May 2014 13:13

You know, if this article is finally successful here, it's going to be funny: first in Spanish, then translated to English and then translated back to Spanish ;)

Anyways, I'm really glad to see that you finally posted it here. I already told you what I thought with the Spanish version, and reading it again, I can see it has been improved. Good job, Reach.

RJB_R 07 May 2014 12:18

At first I thought "oh god a short newb scp with log collapsibles, this is gonna suuuuck" but then was pleasantly surprised by a compelling story, with a pretty good central character. I liked it a lot. I don't really have much else to say, other than you did a good job.

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Whether you like it or not, history is on our side. We will bury you!

weizhong 07 May 2014 15:14

So glad that this has finally been posted.

Dr Reach 07 May 2014 15:20

Thanks, weizhong! : ) And sorry for the long wait. I wanted to rework some issues with isolated sentences and make the whole article a bit shorter (not much, though) and, well, I didn't dare to.

Lumancer 07 May 2014 16:23

This makes two lost cosmonauts in our collection and I love them both. Well done.

Dr Reach 07 May 2014 17:58

Thank you very much, kind sir. : )

(account deleted) 07 May 2014 19:49

Risky. The concept is complex, so much so that I feel it's going to take me a few more times reading this to grasp it fully. With that being the case, the piece relies much more heavily on its execution, and that is where this shines. I really like the buildup with the logs, and the Cold War-era atmosphere you achieved with this gives this that "dry-yet-menacing official document" feel that I like so much with the SCP format. It could be that my biases towards space-based things and Soviets are driving me here, but I really enjoyed this.

There are a few odd grammatical turns here and there, but overall this was very well done. Upvoted.

Dr Reach 07 May 2014 20:24

There are a few odd grammatical turns here and there, but overall this was very well done.

This might be due to my own difficulty with English (Spanish speaker here). While I would very much appreciate specific observations on the matter (that would also help me polish my English further), I'm just happy you enjoyed it. : )

_{Edit: Also, I must admit it'd be far worse if I hadn't got a lot of some help from other users.}

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TL333s 07 May 2014 22:37

I felt supremely lost during the description of what the satellite actually does (the reversing orbit thing), and further confusion over the first two addenda. The third explained things, but I almost think it explained too much. But then, given what happens to the guy, I couldn't not upvote.

Dr Reach 07 May 2014 22:47

I felt supremely lost during the description of what the satellite actually does (the reversing orbit thing), and further confusion over the first two addenda. The third explained things, but I almost think it explained too much.

I must admit confusion has always been an issue with this skip. I've tried to rework it several times, and the closest I've come to expressing it right is its current wording. Nevertheless, thanks again. : )

TL333s 07 May 2014 22:58

At least I had it figured out by the end, but it did take all the way until the final addendum.

Doktori 08 May 2014 09:58

Well done.

Litfried 21 May 2014 10:41

I really like this one. A cool concept, and good characterisation. Personally I had got it before the third addendum and thought it explained a little too obviously what was happening, but it works for the character and as others didn't get it until then I think you should keep it.

Sophia Light 05 Jun 2014 23:42

Compelling premise, good writing, eerie, feels- I love it. I think you had a good amount of exposition- it's easy to over-obfuscate scips.

Dr Reach 05 Jun 2014 23:45

Glad you liked it, Dr. Light. : )

Gene R 19 Nov 2014 17:21

I'm not really comfortable with the father calling his son using a full name. Sounds too official. A shortened "pet" name would be better ("Tolya" in this case).

Dr Reach 19 Nov 2014 17:36

Good point, and thanks for the input. Adding. :)

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