- Huge thanks to editor Rimple and also users sirpudding, mlister, HisShad0w and multizig, all of whom gave good feedback on drafts of this. Several people independently remarked that the opening scene between Wheeler and SCP-8473 was tonally inconsistent/unrelated to the rest of the Tale, which is why it's been edited out. But it may appear one day in a different form, we shall see!
- This Tale takes place approximately one hour prior to the events of CASE COLOURLESS GREEN.
- Alternate titles considered were "For Those Who Died In Darkness" and "Tomb Of The Unknown Unknown".
- Stuff which I ditched for the sake of brevity: actual ghost interactions; references to real ancient European standing stones which are much smaller but whose origins are if anything even harder to guess at because the science just doesn't exist to figure out who put a stone somewhere; the idea that this dead culture perhaps built this memorial in anticipation of some future Antimemetics War; some deeper observations about memetic epidemiology and natural immunity, which modern humanity assuredly does not have…
- This is the last of the [counts] four flashback chapters of Five Five Five Five Five. Next time: the actual story continues.
- Oh! Also, the Antimemetics saga finally passes the Bechdel Test.
I will always be impressed by how cleverly you can tell info in what is basically an expositiony form without it making it feel that way at all. More fantastic work as always.
+1
The trick seems to be having one of the characters actively work their way towards the information so that we are only discovering it as they do. That way it's not really exposition in the sense of just being told stuff. It's an extremely clever, approach, I'm stealing it and I hope the antimimetics don't get me before I have a chance to utilise it somewhere…
The tension in this piece is palpable, and your infodumps remain as engrossing as ever.
Absolutely fantastic. Amongst all the works on the site, I find your Antimemtic Division works uniquely chilling.
I feel I have a new appreciation for how difficult it must be to write stories wherein the central theme is all the characters forgetting everything that happens. And how good you are at it!
and punches her behind the ear
Did SCP-2828 cushion the blow, or am I overthinking it?
Wheeler is collapsed against the wall of the passage
but then
She steps backwards, over the threshold.
She is never shown standing up, so I had to reduce it to "she makes a step over the threshold" in my translation.
Absolutely amazing. Can't wait to see where the story goes next.