SCP-4309 / Discussion

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DrChandra 05 Oct 2018 17:50

"Tired of your home? Sick of comfort? Come to the Hole in the Vacant Lot out back of the Ralph’s and huddle with Us.

Who are we? Good question.

Come to the Hole in the Vacant Lot out back of the Ralph’s and huddle with Us.

Why do we want you to come? Why did we spend money for this airtime? We understand you are confused.

But: Hole, Vacant Lot, Ralph’s, huddle, Us.

For the low-low price. Act today. Or tomorrow. Not Wednesday. Wednesday is no good for Us.

Anyway, we’re almost out of airtime, so just come on down to the Hole in the Vacant Lot out back of the Ralph’s and huddle with Us.

Or else."

~ Welcome to Night Vale, Episode Five.

So, yeah, just some creepypasta monsters. T'is the season, and I'm hoping I managed to make them interesting enough to earn a few upvotes.

Thanks to my beta readers: CaptainKirby, ChrisPratten,Darkstuff, Drblackbox, IHP, stormbreath, superblooby, thebillith, and Weryllium.

Boogey_Man23 05 Oct 2018 18:28

Heh, I'm imagining this looking kinda like… Gibdos at the Bottom Of The Well in Kakariko Village or something (odd reference?)

But, to the story, I like the way it seems to start with an eerie balance of creepy / playfu,l with the enacting of these tableau scenes, then by the end tips that balance to definitely dangerous.

Question

Is the idea that the threat was ultimately brought on by the research itself? Seems like these bodies were keen to just stay in the pit and not bother anyone until the Foundation started doing these surgeries on them.

Anyhow, this gets my +1

DrChandra 06 Oct 2018 02:49

Yes and no. They didn't become dangerous until someone opened their eyes, but someone likely would have come along eventually, and they may not have been able to contain SCP-4309 as well as the Foundation did.

Mr Kinsey 23 May 2019 11:04

I was thinking the same. Anyways +1 for the creeps!

ResearcherSheppard 05 Oct 2018 18:30

Creative and creepy! +1!

Edna Granbo 05 Oct 2018 18:57

I don't understand the violent brawl and casting lots positions, but other than that I like this. +1

Prototype_Toaster 05 Oct 2018 19:01

Loving the 19th century gothic horror vibe, here

+1

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djkaktus 05 Oct 2018 20:49

Bit too much here for my taste.

A Random Day 05 Oct 2018 20:53

It's not a bad article, just a bad DOA article. A good DOA article provides hints of conspiracy and promotes an atmosphere of unease. It makes you think whatever was locked away was locked away for a reason and should not be bothered at all. This doesn't hit those marks - if anything, the Foundation experimenting on them so much provides the opposite feeling.

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mickeyten 05 Oct 2018 21:04

Agreed. Remove the (somewhat forced) DOA connection, and I like this a lot. To be honest, I feel the test logs could be done away with altogether as well, but that may just be me.

MstrPickles 06 Oct 2018 02:51

I like the feeling it gives me. Like a jump scare while reading.

BoyanV 06 Oct 2018 10:15

Really light, fun little read. Is it per chance the same anomaly SCP-507 encounters in one of its logs?

DrArmstrong 07 Oct 2018 02:42

I agree the DOA reference was unnecessary. DOA articles have a certain air of mystery and unease that this article, while creepy, didn’t quite have.

That aside, I really like the anomaly and the story the article tells, so it’s an upvote from me.

Prototype_Toaster 07 Oct 2018 02:52

I'm gonna sound like a zoomer, but what the hecke! Is a DOA article
It's Dead Or Alive, innit?

TheHouseOfBalloons 07 Oct 2018 03:38

It’s the ones with a reference to “SCP Foundation Department of Abnormalities” like 3790 and 4220. They’re usually about sone type of containment chamber.

Connor MacWarren 07 Oct 2018 04:54

Don't forget 4099.

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