There's still a SCP-XXXX in there. Otherwise, pretty cool. +1.
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Hello, as this stands, it is just a truck that is also organic. It didn't really interest me through the weirdness aspect as the foundation already has several "objects that shouldn't be organic, but are".
Where you put that agitating it makes it [DATA EXPUNGED] and then hinted at what that means, I liked that, but you only have one line of emphasis on it and then the report just abruptly ends.
I feel that there is a problem with tone where you say "it walks with wave-like lurching motions, somewhat like those of an earthworm." The foundation doesn't usually make subjective similes. If it moves a certain way, just state that it moves a certain way.
I'd be willing to change my vote if it had more oomph
I liked the draft, and I like it now. Here's to successing the 1524 slot. +1
Didn't find very interesting needs a hook in my opinion
I felt creeped out immediately seeing a picture of a nondescript white van. This was pretty creative. The reproduction part was a nice touch. Great use of redaction.
I like the use of local color, especially since I listen to KZOK all the time in my car.
Actually, a second thought; considering the formats of those two stations, is there any rhyme or reason to why it's specifically calmed by country music and enraged by classic rock? What happens if it hears a different station with the same format? Considering that it's presenting itself as a Hispanic person, what happens if it's exposed to a Latino music station?
Why, Latino music causes it to garden, of course!
*is arrested for tasteless stereotyping*
If you know that something is tasteless and offensive, don't post it.
Consider this an official warning. Don't be a shithead in the future.
if your reading this your gay
Sorry about that, I'll avoid such statements in the future.
On the one hand, its a pretty straightforward 'non-organic thing turns out to be organic' body horror piece in some respects, and the reproduction part just seems like borderline sloppy expungement to me. However, there are lots of things I rather like about this, like the idea of an anomalous gardener, the stuff about the gardener moving like an earthworm, and the last line.
Overall, I think its a good article even though its in the same vein as several other similar articles, and although it'd be nice to have some of the expungement cleared up, the rest is good enough for me to overlook it. +1
I liked the latino taste in this. Feels like home. +1
E: Also, do you realize how wide latino music is? Each nation has its own coutnry music. W have also several genres of music that can be called "latino".
I'm confused… I didn't mention latin music at all in the actual piece.
The character's race was purely incidental. I had his name be Freddy Wong originally, but I changed it to Sanchez later on a whim.
Glad you liked it, though.
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