Argh I don't know. I sort of like the idea but at the same time I just feel like there's something missing.
No vote for the moment. Also you might wanna fix referring to the SCP as "she" it should be "it"
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I freakin' love this! Though it doesn't give any results under #0049 Now it does. But still, +1.
Edit: Also, I'm not entirely sure what Y.W.T.G.T.H.F.T is. I think I've seen it before in connection to something religious, but that might have been something else.
Double edit: Something that just came to my mind is that the first footnote seems really unnecessary. I mean, I assume that it sort of works since biscuit is a common name for domestic dogs, but it just seems like a weird addition from a in-universe perspective. I don't know, maybe I'm just missing something.
There's a hint in the description.
2019 edit: Image has been changed to Cute Bernedoodle by Max Pixel, CC0 Public Domain.
Hey crane game! I don't like your tone when you say "you will totally go to hell for this"!
"You'll want to go to hell for this"? I'm almost positive I've got the last five letters right.
Yeah, we're totally going to hell for this.
if your reading this your gay
I like it. I just feel the specimens shouldn't ever leave the game.
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Well if you wanted to write an SCP that made me think "Jesus christ this is messed up" You have succeeded. Slight tonal issues here and there and the result of the test "run it over" is blank. The only thing that carries the article relies on the reader squirming out of hatred for the SCP. Sure you've made me hate your SCP, but do I hate it enough to up-vote it.. I don't know.
Fixed the blank test result. I thought I already fixed that, but it's become something of a curse for me to leave one glaring error when posting to the site.
As for the tonal issues, I'd be more than happy to correct them if you point them out to me.
There's an incorrect SCP title in Experiment #: 0051.
I love it…except for the compulsion to play. I tend not to like the whole "this SCP makes you want to use it" thing. I've yet to see a case where such a compulsion added to the article, and that holds true here.
You're right, that was dumb. Players don't even know what it does until it's too late.
UglyFlower gave me a wonderful suggestion. There is now a new ending log.
Solid new ending, but I think you should include that the results couldn't be reproduced. If you don't include something along those lines, the foundation would start looking into all the other animals the SCP can manifest. So it'd be better to just avoid that entirely.
Also you've included the phrase "[SUPERFLUOUS TEST LOGS REDACTED]" twice. The first time it is written after the second test and the second time it is written at the bottom of the test log. I'm not sure if this was intentional, but having it written twice seems unnecessary.
The Foundation is going to continue to test the machine's capabilities regardless, and specific commands cannot be repeated.
also I kind of like the idea that it can and will kill anything adorable
EDIT: Three times. They're between big jumps in experiment numbers. I wanted to show that the Foundation has killed hundreds of puppies but I knew nobody would actually read 200 of them.
*Delete repeat post
Oh yeah, I forgot about the fact that tests couldn't be repeated. All in all, nice job!
My mind immediately went to nuclear explosion when I began reading the logs. I love how that one played out. I did notice a couple of spelling mistakes but I'm far too tired to list them myself. One thing- in Experiment 240 at the end the maintenance woman is called "Wheeler" instead of her real name. Overall I thought this was horrific. Good job.
Oh, for dog's sake, +1.
One thing, though. Valera is referred to as Maintenance Engineer in the Procedures and one of the experiments, but as Maintenance Technician in most of the experiments?
Oh man. It's been a long time since a long test log actually made and SCP in my opinion. Well fucking done, man.
A salted cracker was dispensed.
I lol'd :D
+1
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