Well here's my first attempt at a SCP. Thanks in advance for any comments.
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I do not care for this one. It seems to just be a box with random magical forces around it, and some boring notes. And it's not that well written either. -1
Your writing is average, there wasn't any one bit that popped out to me as especially bad, and I was able to understand what you were trying to tell me. Unfortunately, what you told me was a box of crayons that teleports into dead bodies and leaves notes. Didn't really catch my interest. Now, this could be good if the items contained in the box had something to tie the disparaging elements together, but it seemed to be totally random to me. If you could tie them together strongly, this might be cool. But for now, I downvote.
Whether you like it or not, history is on our side. We will bury you!
Pretty much what Roget said. I didn't see any underlying theme to these, and would gladly upvote if this were changed to have an "oh, I get it" moment.
I'm sorry, but I just couldn't get into this one! It didn't feel interesting enough for me. I would love to see some sort of change that would pull me in more or make me feel something, such as fear, joy or weirdness.
edit* after reading roget's comment I'd have to say "Yeah do what he said"
I kept expecting the notes or the objects to somehow be tied to the corpses that they teleported to. I mean, it _feels_ like this thing is just making terrible puns/jokes about ways that people died - but I don't have any actual deaths to correlate it to so I'm just left with basically nothing.
I hadn't really thought of tying it to the corpses, but I quite like the idea. I might add the corpses used to the list, hint at it that way. And that would help add a bit more of a hook to tie things together. Thanks for the idea.
I get to cast the deciding vote for now and bring this up to a +1. It's all kind of obvious but I still like it. As Drewbear recently posted out in the forums there is too much demand for skips to have elaborate backstories. I feel this works just fine as is.
e. my main point being that the objects that the foundation works with are anomalous enough to not need to adhere to specific patterns or logic.
I feel as though it needs more of a "This is why the note and object was related" and a contrast of "why the fuck is that the item" or "why in sam hell is that the note". Over all the hook/meat/whatever could be the logs. I'd expand on it. +1 because it's unique, it's weird, and it's unworldy.
Minor stylistic quibble:
I would remove the word "same" from
…metal tin, of the same design…
as it implies to me that there is reason to believe that the tin is a facsimile or reproduction, not an original.
I really like this, in a quiet, hands-folded sort of way. It leaves my head full of questions, but that's not always a bad thing.
+1
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