Ok! After over 2 years lurking this palce, I finally wrote something. Special thanks to Tuomey, Athena_Grey (so many questions!) and Vivax. If I forgot your name, let me remind you how bad I am with names. I am damn nervous for this. Enjoy!
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Great idea man. Proof that the Written word is mightier than the sword. Then again, he probably would be fighting with it.
I can deduce what 1516-1 is, but you need to state what it is directly.
Also, refusing to give him access to dangerous words, then giving him a flipping bible is really fricking stupid. The bible has a ton of words that could be construed as dangerous. I don't want to know what he's going to do with words like brimstone, or god. And for god's sake, don't let him get ahold of any demon names.
downvoted.
Edit: also, what about fictional concepts? could you make a a magic wand, or a dragon?
May I ask you in what way this can explain more?
Whenever SCP-1516 enters in direct contact with a single, written concept, said word will detach itself from the paper and will deform to fit a functional object depicting the previous concept of the word (hereby called SCP-1516-1).
Actually, I should ponit it is tridimensional. Fixed
I fixed the second point.
And for the last point, if it affects the word "dragon" it will be the same thing that happened to "dog".
What about inanimate fictional concepts? And you still haven't explained why we're giving it what may very well be one of the most dangerous books on the planet for it. Heck, you could give it the anarchists cookbook and it would just blow a hole in the wall, rather than creating what could possibly be an interdimensional horror.
I gave it a Bible because I (the Author) wanted it to have something to read.
… So you're risking what could possibly result in an XK because you don't want it to be bored. Certainly you could choose a better book for it to have. Or maybe The Foundation could just preview its reading material and make sure there wasn't any dangerous words beforehand?
I fixed the article to show it cant affect the Bible. And no, it just affects nouns. It wont bring a rain of sulphur and fire using the Bible.
Hm. Although it tickles my brain slightly, I'm still a bit irked as to why it's incapable of messing with the bible. Perhaps it just respects the bible too much or something?
Also, as an aside, I'm curious as to how it affects proper nouns.
Nothing. Imagine its effect as a muscle. There are certain things too heavy for it to lift. Oh and about the XK, it can actually provoke one, but not in the way you think (and certainly I won't tell how that would happen since I'm not planning to write it at all).
Check that last paragraph for typos. "English" when referring to the language should always be capitalized (Spanish, too). You kinda flip back and forth in that last part. I found "tridimensional" a little clunky for word choice, but I suppose it's scientifically accurate.
Once it's cleaned up a bit, I'll happily upvote. I enjoyed this one.
I'm missing however it is you changed it to make him unable to affect the bible.
Still, this is a really cool concept. At first i thought it was a Cassie-like thing with words, but it quickly dawned on me how different it is.
One thing i have to wonder about, when it is inspected closer, does its physical form actually change, or is it a perceptive thing limited to the one examining it? It sounds like the former, but the latter made my head hurt enough to wonder.
Also, is there an outer limit to the behavior? As in what's the minimum description to form him that is possible?
I'm also wondering what a mass spectrometer would get out of him.
See, you can tell i like it, because my questions are motivated from curiosity, rather than something being wrong. Very good sign.
Lots of typographical errors, ironically, plus an SCP-XXXX. I think with some editing, and especially an eye towards tone, especially in the test log, could improve this. I do like the central idea, but some of the wording is a bit confusing and could definitely be streamlined.
Even if it can only transform nouns, giving it access to the Bible is still a fucking stupid idea.
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Piffy is an SCP Foundation Moderator, Lv. 9001 Squishy Wizard, and Knight of the Red Pen.
Yah I'm with this. Giving it a bible is silly.
I like the rest of it though. I think the rest of it is cute as hell. I would snuggle it. <3
Living the dream, or dreaming the life?
Honestly, I thought a lot about if allowing it to have or not the bible, but It's my personal touch for the skip. It wouldn't be the same for me with no bible.
P,S: and by "personal touch", I don't mean I'm going to give a bible to any other SCP I would make in the future.
E: I also tried to explain that even with the bible in its hands, it can't affect it in the same way you can't lift your entire house over your shoulder.
It just seems very dangerous to give it a Bible.
The Foundation is neither cruel nor kind but cold. They aren't just going to toss a book full of highly dangerous words (angel, demon, brimstone, fire, wrath, war, apocalypse, ad infinitum) to a word-based SCP. In-universe this is a Euclid-Class and there's not any good reason for the Foundation to risk deleterious consequences just to make one SCP happy.
I get that it can't affect it, (although I don't fully understand why), but does the Foundation know, and, assuming they think they know, would they risk it.
There are also a lot of a couple typos.
This is a nice skip, but I'm downvoting until the typos are patched up and the Bible thing is resolved.
I do like this a lot. I'm not, uh, opposed to giving it a bible, but perhaps using a form from which it can't take words would be better. Also, the constant use of contractions threw me off - I feel that the article would be more on-tone if the contracted words were expanded.
When it's viewed from a closer perspective
Cut 'it's'.
SCP-1516's anatomy is always labeled with the simplest possible term for the body part.
Unclear. Are the words deformed to fit the shapes of body parts? Or is 1516 basically a stick figure made of words until you look more closely? Confusing. The test logs imply deformation, but it should be clarified in the Description.
it appears to be unable to control it in any form.
"form" is the wrong word.
Result: Upon contact, the word suddenly detached itself, grew in size and deformed to form a tridimensional couch.
You constantly shift tense throughout, like "has claimed," "claimed", and "claims" in test logs. Clean this up.
Whenever SCP-1516 enters in direct contact with a single, written concept
Unclear. The word has to be written… by itself? Is it sufficient to not be part of a sentence — like, would a list of words work? Also, what does a 'concept' mean here? You claim you mean 'noun' in the discussion thread, but that's not what you said. And none of your examples are concepts, just objects.
Result: No change. SCP-1516 claims it can't affect anything beyond an isolated word at once.
This should be in the Description. See above. And it's still unclear. How isolated is "isolated"?
SCP-1516: He was a lovely man, but he had problems focusing in a single subject. Nothing more to say.
Vasquez: Then we are done here.
This feels like the interview ended because the author really wanted to end it, not because the conversation would realistically have gone this way.
At ████/██/██ was approved to receive an English course 3 times a week.
holy shit wait what
They decided to give the SCP a massive power boost for literally no reason? Holy shit, man. At least attempt to justify this! That's just stunning.
Also, regarding the Bible issue — that's complete nonsense. You also have to justify it. The Foundation has no idea what the full extent of this creature's powers are, or how much they may evolve. Just based on the article and nothing else, he could conceivably rip words out and make them come to life. There is essentially no possible way you can justify giving him any book without completely rewriting the article.
How about this: Give him an audiobook copy of the Bible (doesn't matter the method so long as text is not involved with the audio player). He can just listen to it all the time, and there's no risk because it's just spoken word. It doesn't have the visual impact of him reading a book, but it wouldn't require rewriting the entire article.
You could also make his favorite passage the opening of John because I am subtle like a rockslide
Oh man, you just saved my head with the audiobook suggestion. I will fix everything you pointed tomorrow (sorry, but I really don't have time enough now and my eyes are just no helping me at all). You know, I really wanted to receive this when I posted the draft in the forum it (besides a few comments, the draft got awkwardly ignored). Oh well, I really wanted to post a flawless article, but this is really far from that.
And about Jhon… Not gonna say it on the article, but you can headcanon that.
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