This is an answer to Bright's "Write a scip in 1 hour, get feedback in 24 hours and post" challenge. Enjoy and let me know if something needs to be addressed.
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This is pretty cool, but I can't help but think that it doesn't need to be said that subjects reduce usable space by their volume — not only because it's obvious, but because in a sense, there ISN'T any usable space in the trailer to begin with.
if your reading this your gay
That's true. I just liked the idea of the trailer slowly filling up with people trying to be salt shakers, ketchup bottles and packets of splenda, and wanted to hint at that image. Do you think I should remove that?
Keep that aspect in there, but change the wording to be less redundant. Would give suggestions, but I gotta jet.
if your reading this your gay
Yes. I'm for it. This is gloriously weird and disturbing. Identity fuckery always seems to skeeve me out, no matter how ridiculous.
+1
Neutral for now.
I'm mixed and I have to think about this. On the one hand, it seems like typical identity collapse, something that I think we can all agree the the toaster that is me and the identity-mixing laundry room does better. On the other hand, I liked a lot of the mental images from the addendum and I personally don't think its bad to have similar skips that may share a common origin/effect. I'll think about it and come back. Plus, its absolutely great for a one-hour skip.
EDIT: Eh, what the hell, +1 for redacting dash eleven.
I really liked how you organized the addendum, it started out funny but ended with cringes.
Dammit Crayne I would have looked at this if I didn't get on chat so late
well, for once, a data redacted that makes me glad it's there. not sure I wanted to know what a chemical toilet human would do anyway. The addendum pulls the feel of this skip together for me.
+1
Wow… this is weird. In a good way.
All but SCP-1946-8 remain inside SCP-1946. SCP-1946-7 is deceased, and was examined to determine potential alterations to subjects' physiology. None were found, though SCP-1946-7's remains have not been noted to undergo decomposition since the subject expired.
Should all of these be -8?
(account deleted)I actually dislike that exungement quite a bit, but this all turned out rather well.
Also:
Has attempted to interface with SCP-1946's supply of gas canisters.
Is that a euphamism?
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