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Special thanks

Wazikamawata 02 Aug 2018 05:31

This is my first SCP and it really wouldn't have been possible without the help of this great community. Special thanks to:
amnestic_protocol, for your amazing feedback, and giving me the courage to publish this.
Countless Skies for your great encouragement and guidance.
ResearcherKnochelman and DrAlewine for their forum feedback
Drecka for the invaluable fine-tooth comb assessment
And Lixerf, who took the mammoth task of tackling my first draft and helping refine it!

Last edited on 10 Aug 2018 07:35 by Wazikamawata Show more

Re: Special thanks

amnestic_protocol 02 Aug 2018 13:02

I'm psyched to see this up and doing well. It's a killer idea, and your instincts are keen as heck. Now all you gotta do is do it again!

Prototype_Toaster 02 Aug 2018 05:46

You got something pretty unique here and I can always appreciate that in an SCP

I think everyone's downvoting due to wikidot messing up and screwing up the articles format so I decided to fix that for you.

Otherwise, nice skip: +1

TL333s 02 Aug 2018 13:11

I have to admit I was disappointed that billboards advertising "ill wishes" weren't connected to a hotline that cursed people. That said, I think this works; I was particularly impressed by the kid who wanted his parents back together. Like, it's not a simple matter to fix a family with magic.

One complaint is that -B is never defined. I can gather from context what it's supposed to be, and this would be a trivial matter to fix. +1

Wazikamawata 02 Aug 2018 13:37

Thankyou for the feedback, and the upvote! I did define -B immediately after -A, but it could definitely be clearer. I'll relocate the designation to explicitly refer to the phone voice a little later in the body.

(account deleted) 02 Aug 2018 15:48

Mostly everything that the users above me said. Great concept, far-reaching enough to be classed as Keter but still containable.

Capitalize "addendum" and "test log" in some places; this is the only formatting quirk which I found.

HumousBoy962 03 Aug 2018 19:32

I will live my life that the boy in the first experiment met Bob Saget.

This was good! I enjoyed the simplicity of the fact that this landline is just around to make sick kids feel good, but for some reason, will make those who attempt to extort it suffer, even if they're just kids, but why? Why would this SCP harm young children? Is there a backstory? Did some sort of World Destroying Event Occur? It'd be nice to know, but this is great! 87%

Casponaut 03 Aug 2018 21:56

I like how this turns from a standard feel good skip (which is good on it’s own right) to something more cruel and malicious. +1 from me.

Harlan_Wade 05 Aug 2018 16:15

I loved this premise, and you executed it perfectly! I look forward to seeing more stuff from you!

Zzuxon 07 Aug 2018 20:47

All around solid work. +1. I wanted to comment to inform you that I am currently planning out how to write Santa Claus as a mainlist SCP, and will have it done by the holiday season… so keep an eye out :).

Wazikamawata 08 Aug 2018 06:04

I actually had 4040 initially, based on the classic 'How Dr Clef Saved Christmas' tale, but the tale was edited while I was drafting to avoid clashing with Series V. If your skip ends up on the mainlist I'll definitely look at replacing those black boxes, though!

Mortos 18 Aug 2018 10:10

I like this, it's short and clean and doesn't overstay its welcome, and your logs are interesting and have some cool implications. I especially liked the kid who "wants to see mummy again" and then immediately dies - that's some dark stuff right there.

My only real issue with this is the number of blackboxes everywhere. I can't see a single blackbox that you couldn't replace with the actual information with no issues whatsoever. Besides that though, I enjoyed this. +1

Varaxous 07 Sep 2018 03:13

AGH this one tears me up so badly.

I so desperately want to like it and I do but at the same time AUGH.

Take your +1 before I reconsider ;~;

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