Here it goes, I hope this doesn't sink into downvotes. Special thanks to Voct for tweaking the Experiment Log and a few parts of the Description.
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Hm, so it's a repeating loop of two cars crashing into each other and blowing up?
Well written. Have an upvote. +1
I remember this! I offered to do a line by line in chat and forgot. I've actually got a document saved that's for this skip. Well sorry.
Apology upvote.
During scheduled testing on ██/██/20██ during scheduled testing
But upvote!
Image is busted.
I recommend uploading your file rather than linking it from another site. The latter is considered bad form.
Okay, I'll obtain a new file for it in the next hour.
It's a bit too rough around the edges for me, but nothing immediately jumps out at me screaming "FIX THIS."
I suppose I can try.
Due to the destruction SCP-1858 may cause
I don't think this is a necessary line, especially considering it doesn't particularly match what comes after it.
to be under remote satellite surveillance at all times
You see? "Because this thing is so destructive, watch it with a satellite" doesn't match very well for me, at least in terms of describing how to contain this thing.
All entrances and exits leading to Route 35 are to be permanently closed off from public access
According to Wikipedia... US Route 35 is 663 kilometers long (412 miles), has 83 major intersections, and passes through three states.
Now, perhaps not all are easily accessed, and perhaps it is not the most traveled road, but to simply say "close off all public access to the entirety of this road" stretches my suspension of disbelief just a bit too far. I may be nitpicking, but I think you could stand to be a little more creative with your containment.
inspected for any barriers and/or debris that can prevent SCP-1858
Could instead of can
SCP-1858 consists of two (2) entities
I would think "vehicles" would be a better word choice than entities, especially considering you call them vehicles every other time.
license plates of both vehicles have been obscured with duct tape
How do we know it's duct tape? Did we get a really clear picture with the satellite or did Researcher McQueen jog out onto the road after it went by and do a visual check?
manifest approximately eight (8) kilometers apart… then accelerate towards each other… speed of approximately 90 km/h
Do they start from a standstill or at speed? How quickly are they accelerating?
collision will be followed by an explosion
What kind? Gas? C4? Nuclear? There's a good variety of explosion types
undetermined strength of the explosion
I'm not an explosionologist, but this seems like the sort of thing the Foundation would be able to figure out, especially if it happens with any amount of regularity
If the usual route of either component
First entities, then vehicles, then SCP-1858-1 and SCP-1858-2, now components. Consistency is a plus.
is deliberately obstructed
What about unintentionally? What constitutes obstruction? Would a branch or something that they need to briefly change lanes to avoid count or does it have to cover the road?
The test logs and/or incident reports
You mention "during scheduled testing" in three logs that are also listed under "incident report." In these tests, the cars appeared somewhere else. What exactly did were they testing? Did they intentionally block roads to see where the cars would go, or did they screw up and not clear the road properly? Was it an incident because there was unexpected test failure, or because there was civilian death, or both, or neither?
A disturbing trend… SCP-1858 appears to have a preference to re-locate onto roads containing heavy traffic and flammable and/or explosive material
It only involved explosive/flammable material in one of four tests, nitpicky, but I don't think you can call that a trend.
I still love this idea enough that even just decent execution is enough for me. Nice work, Clockwork. You've come a long way.
Whether you like it or not, history is on our side. We will bury you!
Thank you sir.
And give Voct some credit as well, he assisted me in developing the title, and for cranking up some new ideas in the experiment logs. (Apologies Voct)
I sort of like how there's no given or implied backstory here. Something about the way it's written makes me want to imagine various explanations for it. Great work. +1.
if your reading this your gay
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