This is okay. Didn't really light my world on fire, but it was good enough for an upvote.
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well I read the SCP's "name" in the SCP mainlist and oh my god now I get it jesus christ this is genius
and b) is not a giraffe (Giraffa camelopardalis).
I admit that this piked my interest, because giraffes are wicked cool. But overall I don't get it. I understand it's a hell for giraffes, but I feel it's (or I'm) missing something. So no vote for now.
I don't like the quantitative measurement of religious fervor.
but the primary goal of agents in the area should be to map out the location, if possible.
Why? There's nothing for 1000s of Km!
constructed of an currently
tie poe.
more than 1000km in all directions
''in any direction'' would be better I think.
I… what?
Standard units of measurement for religious fervor?! (Which you misspelled the unit at least once, by the way)
A "gateway to hell" with a temp that high that can only be determined by touching it because it doesn't radiate heat but it doesn't melt anything that touches it because it doesn't radiate heat except it does enough that we can measure it except it doesn't. *head explodes*
A gateway that apparently only lets atheists through.
Demons/angels that are really, really stupid at their jobs. I mean, seriously, yelling the equivalent of a "yo mama" joke at a giraffe?
I just… this is far, FAR too much of a baffling mess for me to take seriously. It sounds like something out of a comedy-fantasy book, but one of those cheap ones that's only about 100 pages long because the author couldn't sustain the "plot" any further.
Giving bearhugs to the unsuspecting since 1872.
I'm pretty sure that's not the first article to use centiakiva as a fervor unit; SCP-1844 used it first.
Centikakivas are dumb in any case.
I sing of arms and the man
Storm-tossed by Hera's jealousy
A personally designed hell for Giraffes. And then giraffe angels come to rescue them? This is most certainly interesting, but I think I need a few more hours to process this. I'm just going to stay neutral for now, but possibly a +1 for later.
Edit: one of the footnotes says there was testing on what materials passed through SCP-1557-B; so are you saying they willingly got tested? Or did the Foundation throw various materials at them?
The -B's didn't really have any reason to care about Foundation operatives, really; I mean, what could they feasibly do? So they just ignored them. Foundation agents more like tried to touch various materials to SCP-1557-B just like that.
I have to admit this is a genius idea, however I'm a little confused. Is SCP-1557-1 just a door in the middle of nowhere? Or is it actually attached to something?
To quote spikebrennan in this post:
For readers who may not have a background in theological engineering: the akiva (named after http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Rabbi_Akiva ), is the ISU unit for fervor. To measure it, one places the subject three meters from a properly calibrated thaumaturgic meter (taking care to perform the measurement in an environment free from thaumaturgically reflective surfaces, such as silver or certain types of minerals such as marble, that may interfere with an accurate reading.
I'm sorry, it's still pulling me out of immersion because it makes no sense to me.
It doesn't even make sense in the context of the Foundation's "universe of anomalies" — it's basically Discworld logic. And also it's inaccurate to the real history of our universe.
I cannot take this seriously. First off, centiakivas are an abomination that's almost enough to make me downvote on their own. They're silly, borderline offensive, and make no sense. Beyond that, though, it's giraffe hell. And then the Harrowing happened. The sphere's taunts are silly and distracting, and as hells go, it's really a pretty unimaginative one.
It's almost absurd enough for me to like, but this is too timid. You've just taken Christian theology (although granted the Harrowing of Hell is mildly obscure), and ported it over to giraffes. Remove the silliness, or go far further. This halfway approach is very weak.
Whatever you do, please drop centiakivas.
It's almost absurd enough for me to like, but this is too timid. You've just taken Christian theology (although granted the Harrowing of Hell is mildly obscure), and ported it over to giraffes. Remove the silliness, or go far further. This halfway approach is very weak.
Basically this.
It starts out pretty promising, but ultimately seems half-formed, half-finished. I'd say go either dead-serious with it, or farther off the deep end. As it is, it's just too middling to really…be much of anything.
And the centiakivas are pretty awful.
I cannot take this seriously. First off, centiakivas are an abomination that's almost enough to make me downvote on their own. They're silly, borderline offensive, and make no sense. Beyond that, though, it's giraffe hell. And then the Harrowing happened. The sphere's taunts are silly and distracting, and as hells go, it's really a pretty unimaginative one.
Well, to be perfectly fair, it -is- a hell for Giraffes. And they aren't exactly the smartest of animals.
A hell built for giraffes. Huh.
I agree with everyone on the centiakivas. I don't think it's necessary to include a unit for religious fervor. There are many other ways to acknowledge the need for personnel with certain beliefs (see scp-616).
I think footnote 1 can be incorporated into the main text. You could even rephrase it to stress that the door is breaking a few laws by not radiating heat.
The dialogue could be better. You should make it clear that Fredricks is with the Foundation. Also, the references to the balls of light seem a little inconsistent. You designated one with a unique number, and then referred to another as simply "an instance of SCP-1557-B".
I can't really take this seriously right now, and the centiakivas nearly made me dismiss the entire article. That said, I think this has potential. Change the above mentioned, work on the overall tone a bit, and figure out if you want this to be scary, or just anomalous. I like the idea, but the execution needs work. Withholding vote for now.
Crosses the line but doesn't go far enough past it to be funny. Downvoted.
…what is that supposed to mean? This isn't a joke SCP.
It COULD be made into one, but it seems to be focused on the content rather than the the humor.
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