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(account deleted)instead, they appear to be selected based on they climate they lived in in the Mesozoic Era
You say the word "in" twice. IMO, the word "during" should replace the second "in." Other than that, I like this.
First off, I love this idea.
Second of all, good job on remembering the italics for genus names and the like. There are some places where you shouldn't use italics - as a clade name, Dinosauria remains unitalicized; and if you're talking about a taxonomic group of animals (e.g. spinosaur) the name of it is generally unitalicized and lowercase as well. (A couple spelling mistakes regarding names as well - for example Archeopteryx > Archaeopteryx and Celophysis > Coelophysis. And Yinxin Formation should be spelled as Yixian…I don't blame you though, I have a hard time wrapping my head around the Chinese language too.) There are a couple of other details that strike me as well, although I can't put my finger on it exactly. All this does seem a bit nitpicky, but paleontology is my thing so I can't help myself :P
Third, I must say the imagery of Therizinosaurus is quite delightful, especially in the context you've given it here.
Upboated because this is super good, honestly, but two ethnographic corrections:
Several instances of SCP-1265-A have been integrated into the folklore of the Lingala and Baka(pygmy) tribes in the area near SCP-1265
Lingala is the language, not the speakers of the language; there is no Lingala tribe or people. Baka and pygmy are not the same; the Baka are an ethnic group whose name has historically been used inaccurately to describe the entire group of bambenga and bayaka peoples in central Africa and the Congo. The term "pygmy" is generally considered by the people to whom the term refers to be perjorative.
An interview conducted by Dr. Welles in a Lingala village 5.5 KM away from the perimeter of SCP-1265 regarding SCP-1265-A sightings. All dialog is translated from the Lingala Language.
Again, there is no Lingala tribe, and thus no Lingala villages. The village is probably an Mboshi one, if the reserve is where I think it is. Also, language doesn't need to be capitalized.
There may be more, but these are the ones that jumped out at me.
I had to handle some its/it's errors, but otherwise this looks decent.
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Ok, love it. The only thing that bugs me is the a into A transition. Why us it if we have not discovered the fossils they are aggressive? Are they mad because we never found them? Find and name the fossils they are suddenly happy? Don't get that.
So many awesome implications in this. I particularly like the idea that a species being discovered elsewhere causes its representatives here to become docile.
One thing that caught my attention is the word "chosen" in the early parts of the description. Who or what is doing the choosing, and how do researchers know about it?
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