Been a long time in draft. Let's see how it goes.
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Woops, these shouldn't really be automatons anymore really. They're no longer clockwork or mechanical. Fixing.
E: I'm really confusing myself. They are sort of robots, and those who have seen my previous drafts know that they were clockwork in their conception. If they are not mechanical, do they qualify as automatons? If they're made of organic matter, and are moving does it qualify them as alive? If they're capable of grasping philosophical thought for their religion does that qualify them as sapient? I don't know anymore.
I'm pretty neutral on this at the moment, though I did kinda like the transcript at the end. It made me think of when Gollum talks to himself in The Lord of the Rings.
SCP-1253-1 instances will progress from an unknown origin point to the affected cities and interact with subjects in the age range of six to fifteen.
SCP-1253-1 instances will interact with subjects in the six to fifteen age range.
Did you mean to include the age range twice?
EDIT: After rereading, I've decided I like it. +1
I thought it was best to clarify. I can change it.
I'd say you'd be alright to get rid of the first one, but it might just be me.
I agree — it fits much better in the second location.
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Oh, hell. I somehow completely missed the part where they weren't just boring plain automatons and are now made completely out of rotting flesh. That's pushed me into the upvote region.
But now I have the image of these things decked out in feathers, rambling on and on about human sacrifice to a child while waving assorted genitalia everywhere
SCP-1253-1 instances are sapient entities,
1) If they really are sapient, why are they being held inside of safes? The Foundation usually treats sapient SCPs better than that, unless there's a good reason.
2) How does the Foundation know that they're sapient, rather than just automatons dispensing pre-recorded messages according to the stimulus they receive?
SCP-1253-1 instances will interact with subjects in the six to fifteen age range.
How do they avoid being detected by adults? If they project some sort of "don't-notice-me" field at adults, how would the MTF find them?
Subjects will exhibit severely impaired judgement
I assume that this includes caring that the entity is made of rotting refuse and body parts. If so, that should probably be explicitly noted.
SCP-1253-1 instances will there instruct subjects in a polytheistic religion bearing heavy similarity to the Quechuan religion.
If there's any difference, then the article should note them.
Subjects who have experienced SCP-1253 phenomenon appear to maintain various correlations.
Though from context I think this means that after a child is exposed they display these characteristics, it might also be interpreted to mean that children who are already like that are selected by the entities.
SCP-1253-1 instances will then select and restrain a subject, which will be killed by strangulation.
Since the entity leads the subject to "the nearest high-altitude landform", where does the other child come from? Or do they attempt to kill the child they just instructed?
1) If they really are sapient, why are they being held inside of safes? The Foundation usually treats sapient SCPs better than that, unless there's a good reason.
Holdover from previous draft. You're lucky I didn't say they were to be dismantled.
2) How does the Foundation know that they're sapient, rather than just automatons dispensing pre-recorded messages according to the stimulus they receive?
How do I know you're not an automaton dispensing prerecorded messages according to received stimulus?
Although previously they were automatons, it felt wrong because the Tag Guide said automatons were machines, and I got very confused. In fact, I might go back and make them organic automatons again as I recall another scip.
How do they avoid being detected by adults? If they project some sort of "don't-notice-me" field at adults, how would the MTF find them?
They just don't interact with them, as in approach and talk. Adults can attack them and such. Which probably has happended a lot, considering they're moving sacks of rotting flesh and there are a lot of would-be zombie survivors out there.
I assume that this includes caring that the entity is made of rotting refuse and body parts. If so, that should probably be explicitly noted.
Yes it does.
If there's any difference, then the article should note them.
Militant extremism against perceived colonialism.
Though from context I think this means that after a child is exposed they display these characteristics, it might also be interpreted to mean that children who are already like that are selected by the entities.
That may need restructuring
Since the entity leads the subject to "the nearest high-altitude landform", where does the other child come from? Or do they attempt to kill the child they just instructed?
Subjects
Well that got fucking creepy fast.
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I liked the previous version, but this is better. Flow is smoother and terminology is clearer, more clinical.
To further muddy the issue on "automatons", I refer you to D&D Flesh Golems. The ultimate answer is in your behind the curtain mechanics, rooted in what you conceive these franken-priests to really be. As opposed to what they merely seem to be to the Foundation and us readers.
I'm fairly certain the name of the language is Quechua, not QuechuaN.
Likewise, I think the adjective is without the "N," as in "Quechua religion."
e: apparently the adjective form is with an N: [http://www.merriam-webster.com/dictionary/quechua]
Improved over the original, I'd say. I thought the "Topic Table" was worded a little strangely. Also,
SCP-1253-1 instances will interact with subjects in the six to fifteen age range.
would sound better as "subject between the ages of six and fifteen."
Otherwise, pretty good!
I'm curious about the Children of the Sun reference. IIRC, it was mentioned in SCP-1000 as an offshot of the Serpent's Hand that was almost completely destroyed by the Foundation themselves because they wouldn't give up information relating to Bigfoot.
Why would there be speculation as to their existence if they form an integral part of the story for SCP-1000?
Because I forgot about SCP-1000. That is why.
They're also a new GoI I'm proposing for the contest. So, conceivably, there could be two CotS in your headcanon.
http://scpsandbox2.wikidot.com/technician-downs
Last tab for mine.
Not bad, but the name might confuse some people; might not come up if it were in a more obscure SCP, but this is the big #1000 we're talking about here. Plus when you search "Children of the Sun", the first thing to come up is Bigfoot.
Although at first I actually thought it was a 231 reference (turns out that was the Children of the Scarlet King), and I had to search myself.
They're called that for a reason though. They're trying to give themselves legitimacy as the successors to the Inca Empire.
Maybe I should call them by their Spanish name?
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