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TKSeoul 14 Jun 2018 14:46

I think having the 4 separate versions of the article really help sell the narrative. That final audio log is great and I can't help but wonder if the mutations would not have occurred if the Foundation handled their containment differently. +1

notgull 15 Jun 2018 16:57

This is a long read, but it’s definitely a worthwhile read. I’ve always had a fear of bugs, especially ones like spiders that can bite. This greatly appeals to that fear.

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Jacob Conwell 19 Jun 2018 04:36

Alright, so, I like the build up over the offsets. You do a good job demonstrating things going from bad to worse as the locusts get more and more aggressive. The final offset particularly interested to see what happens next.

Then the audio log happened.

While its passable, and gets the job done, lines like:

Bullshit. We are the Foundation, humanity's first and final line of defense against what should not exist. I've been doing my job for twenty-seven goddamn years and I've had alien gods and immortal reptiles and sentient ideas try to kill me, and I'm still standing here today.

and

All we can do is run and hide and pray that whatever god watches over our mess of a world has mercy upon us just this once.

just took me out of the immersion. Which is a shame since you were doing so well to trip at the finish line.

No vote. Solid execution, but the audio log is a bit much.

DrMorris 24 Jun 2018 00:58

Thanks for the feedback! I intentionally made Morris a bit melodramatic, but now that I've re-read it some of Chang's lines do seem rather cheesy. I'm planning on rewriting the audio log after the contest ends.

DarkStuff 27 Jun 2018 02:04

I choose to believe that things would have been fine if WWS continued doing containment, feeding them but selling most (which would inevitably get killed). Echoing that the audio log was fairly cheesy, but I did like the article. +1

mlister 16 Sep 2018 01:49

I can't help but feel this is less an article in its own right, and moreso a vehicle for exposition, something to show the series of Diabolus's ex Machina that lead to Genghis becoming an existential threat. It doesn't stand on its own, and it can't really justify the escalation that it has.

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JimmyBoyHaha 03 Feb 2019 04:32

This is so underrated. +1

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Monteparnas 19 May 2019 07:13

For me, this is overrated, but then most apocalyptic scenarios are.

What I particularly don't like here are two problems. First, the critter evolves without any reason or any contribution to the story other than becoming dangerous. It is scary because it suddenly eats flesh, and then anything not-glass, and somehow people get surprised when it starts eating glass, but actually all those developments came out of nowhere.

Second, it isn't actually an article. The Critter Profile is an article. This here is a tale developed on top of the Critter Profile. It doesn't stand as a something without the Profile, and it doesn't stand without the following tales. This is acceptable for a tale, but not for a mainlist article.

This all takes out not only from this article, but actually from all the tales that develop from here. They are not terribly written, just not my cup of tea, but they do are weakened for being based on a weak article. Also it takes out from the characters, because the lack of better containment while this thing evolves really makes them seem too dumb for their plight to be credible. At the very least the number of kept instances should be reduced each time this thing evolves a new trait.

Mackeye 11 Feb 2022 23:36

escalation was fun to read. the audio log was a bit over the top but still cool. +1

cloud silver 11 Jan 2023 13:30

I like the article overall, but I feel like the Foundation was acting kind of incompetent at some points here (example: only Keter at the last iteration? I'd say the risk of escape should make it Keter by version 3 imo, but overall I feel like they were underestimating how dangerous the mutations were)

Filobel 21 Apr 2023 16:37

This one feels a little unbelievable to me.

Ok, so it evolved to eat flesh… that's worrisome but can still be contained and there's no real reason to expect it'll get worse (going from eating some type of organic material to another type is a jump, but going to eating organic to inorganic is on a different level).

But then it evolves to eating anything but glass, and you don't know how that happened. I'm sorry, but it's time to torch these things. If you want to keep observing those things, go get some of the un-mutated ones. Once it has shown it can randomly evolve to eat inorganic stuff, and is now immune to the one thing that is supposedly capable of containing an ARBH class event, how can you think "yeah, it evolved to eat freaking metal, but surely it is impossible it will ever evolve to eat glass! This is still fine! Euclid all the way!" At the very least, it should have been upgraded to Keter right then and there, and should have had some dude on a 24/7 observation duty with the finger on the button ready to torch the whole chamber the moment they see the locust eating the glass.

I'm sorry, I don't buy it.

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