SCP-3266 / Discussion

This is the discussion related to the wiki page SCP-3266.

IAmTheOoga 08 Jun 2018 14:27

This is a very, very good concept. It has good story, real-life references and makes you think. The writing leaves a bit to be desired though. Try running it through the crit wringer a few times. For example, maybe mention where they disappear to right after you explain that they disappear, rather than later. Also, how would the Foundation know where they disappear to? I'll upvote this for now, because I think it has potential.

McBurnsy 13 Jun 2018 12:58

I changed the description so that the reader finds out sooner where those affected by SCP-3266 disappear to. The Foundation knows the location of disappearance based off of the interview given by the Security Officer on site.

sometaters 08 Jun 2018 15:52

I upvoted as well. My only nitpick would be that I expected to see mention of psychiatric treatment earlier, when you mentioned the 3% unharmed survivors.

I honestly thought everything else was solidly written and planned out. While I was reading, I completely forgot that this was a brand new article posted to the site. That says something.

My First SCP

McBurnsy 08 Jun 2018 16:44

Thanks to Sooperrandomname for helping me make this a better article.

Re: My First SCP

Sooperrandomname 13 Jun 2018 15:03

Aw, thanks!

A few gripes, however.

The area in which SCP-3266 has been constructed will henceforth be referred to as Provisional Site-109.

This sentence doesn't read very well. Try this:

SCP-3266 is to be contained within Provisional Site-109.

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If an individual is found dead after an SCP-3266 instance, SCP-3266-1 will visit the individual's next of kin and, in all cases, report that they have been "killed in action".

Omit this sentence, or graft it into the paragraph about SCP-3266-1. It feels shoehorned in between the two sentences about disappearances.

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Based on reports from Security Officer ███████ and MTF O-10 "Bags of Mystery",

Refer to documents in the file.

Based on information gathered from Interview Log 3266.1 and Exploration Log 3266,

Also, Exploration Log titles are usually formatted as: "Exploration Log XXXX".

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SCP-3266 (Taller Tower)

Omit "(Taller Tower)" (unless that's the name of the tower).

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Mobile Task Force O-10 “Bags of Mystery”

Really small nitpick, doesn't matter that much: MTF's are usually named after letters of the Greek alphabet.

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O-10-Cap: We have entered into SCP-3266, do you read me command?
Static is heard from the radio.

Space the two out.

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O-10-3: Lets

Needs to be:

Let's

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Following the exploration of SCP-3266 by MTF-O-10, the O-5 Council has prohibited further expeditions and ordered that future containment efforts be focused on ensuring that no entity exits SCP-3266.

A) It's O5. Not O-5.
B) What entity..?

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Redaction in the Deep Six file kills me. Try un-redacting a couple things.

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██/██/1943 (1715 hours):This is the last report received from Deep Six. No further contact attempts have been met with any sort of response. Deep Six is assumed to be K.I.A. The last report is as follows "(Heavy static) More hostiles… (Heavy static) Time dilation experiment is… (Heavy static).

Fix to:

██/██/1943 (1715 hours): This is the last report received from Deep Six. No further contact attempts have been met with any sort of response. Deep Six is assumed to be K.I.A. The last report is as follows: "(Heavy static) More hostiles— (Heavy static) Time dilation experiment is— (Heavy static)."

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That's about it. I was happy to help!

One last thing:

Self-upvoting is bad form; don't do that.

Last edited on 15 Jun 2018 23:04 by Sooperrandomname Show more

Re: My First SCP

H0dari 04 Apr 2019 17:44

According to the current guidelines, there's no rules about self-voting. It's perfectly fine to vote on your own submission, and people shouldn't be discouraged to do so just because some people think it's unsavory.

GoopLovesYou 23 Apr 2019 15:04

Source for the image

Picture by Kevin Rutherford

ShenHibiki 11 Jul 2019 11:25

the O5 Council has prohibited further expeditions and ordered that future containment efforts be focused on ensuring that SCP-3266-1,-2, and -3

Ensuring what?

And while the idea is good, the last addendum simply over-explains what had enough meat already. It's too perfectly coincidental that the last, garbled message, exactly captured the words needed to explain the situation. Was upvoting before that, to be honest.

Soultear 06 May 2022 03:54

The idea is good, however, this skip has some brazen mistakes (Like the one ShenHibiki mentioned above me) and over-explains stuff too much in the end, I had to downvote.