(account deleted) 30 Sep 2012 00:59
Here goes nothing.
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(account deleted) 30 Sep 2012 00:59
I had a lot of trouble maintaining my suspension of disbelief through this, primarily because it's too… intentionally evil and over-the-top. If it were toned down from lolmurderdeathandorgies to something more on the "strange/scary" side of things, I might reconsider my vote, but I just straight up did not enjoy this.
if your reading this your gay
I'm also unsure why the Foundation doesn't just evacuate the town. There's no real indications of a lasting effect, so it seems that, perhaps with some preliminary experimentation, it should be safe to do. Additionally, it's unclear how the town is able to continue functioning under quarantine of the Foundation. Also, a carved log is just weird.
It's/its mixup, downvoted instantly
Apart from that, I like this, but I agree, the quarantine thing that I suggested does seem too over the top. I shouldn't have suggested containment procedures based on a one-line summary of an SCP, and I apologize for leading you down the wrong path, containment-procedure wise.
Jekeled, you know you're allowed to go in and fix minor grammatical errors like that?
But then they won't learn from their mistake.
Whether you like it or not, history is on our side. We will bury you!
I think this is bloody fantastic. It feels like a book Stephen King never got around to writing (maybe like a sequel to Tommyknockers)
Emphatically upvoted!
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zoosadism!
As far as evacuating the town, perhaps the mill could produce a XK-class prediction if the an evacuation is attempted?
Maybe some kind of ritual if performed would keep the worst of the Mill's clairvoyance at bay?
I do dig the idea of a moral-panic-based anomaly, but this asks too much suspending of the disbelief. I see no way that the Foundation would be cluing all the authority figures in the town in to the truth and no good reason for them to want to in the first place. Also there is the question, as mentioned above, of why they don't just evacuate (or terminate, if worst comes to worst) the residents?
It's a lot easier to run things if the authority figures around town aren't actively fighting you, which they would be if they have no idea what's going on. The Foundation probably isn't briefing them on the existence of the Foundation itself or anything, they're probably just claiming to be government agents, and, due to prior agreements, the US government will back up their story.
It's possible that such an arrangement could be written up in a credible fashion, lots of articles refer to cover stories. It's not, though. As written, the towns administration is aware of what's going on and nobody either leaks the information or simply leaves, which isn't (for me, at least) believable.
This one has potential, but you need to clean up some of the language. You have 1366-A, 1366-B-1 and B-2, 1366-C, and 1366-y, not to mention Site 403. Also, 1366-C and 1366-B-2 are both the newspaper that has evil whatsits on the front page, but I think B-2 is the individual edition of the newspaper and -C is the company that makes newspapers. Then you have the designation of the text contained in B-1 as The Source, which is counterintuitive because it's not the source of anything, but the message: the sawmill, the log, or whatever is behind the sawmill is The Source, not the text, especially when it's referring to the idea, not the original text.
Also, there's apparently nothing bad that happens if the story doesn't get out, so why isn't the containment procedure "Don't let Siskin have a newpaper. Buy them out and smash the presses."
Holding my vote for now.
Not bad. I would personally modify the last log to not mention the "unknown people" sealing the doors and windows, since the unknown people seem like some kind of a writer's tool to get more suspense - but there is no foreshadowing to these people, so they don't seem very plausible when they are mentioned.
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