Got an idea in my head about something that communicates via a victim's heartbeat. It evolved into this. I hope you like it :)
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Not feeling this one; I think the interview log is the main problem for me. Something about the way the tone shifts: it's like you go from something that's being menacing and taking over a person's body (albeit in a quirky way) and then get all chatty, digressive, and conversational with it. It kind of sucks out any tension that had been built up previously.
Which would be forgivable if it paid off somehow, but we don't wind up learning anything about 1868 from the interview that wasn't covered in the description. That said, there's nothing particularly wrong with the idea, and I could see myself upvoting some version of this. Just not the current version.
I'll work on it in a bit, when my internet's more stable.
EDIT: Didn't take as much time as I expected; I think the tone now has it not being nearly as amiable as before. How's it look?
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Basically the same. After looking at it again, it might be more that I just have a problem with the existence of the interview. Four of the last five responses from the SCP are all denials of information ("Do I have to explain this every time?" "I'm not really in the mood to explain," "really, I just had to do a lot of thinking," "I'd like to leave it at that"), and then the researcher's note at the end just says that no information is to be had. It's like, so why did you even make me read this? You could have just stuck the researcher's note in the description.
That's fair, I suppose. I personally enjoy the interview, though; would it work better if I just removed the closing note?
EDIT: Did so myself because I never really liked that paragraph.
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Switching to non-vote because apparently I'm the only person who had a problem with it, and I do think it works better without the researcher note.
SCP-1868: I believe myself to be happy, and if it's alright with you, I'd like to leave it at that.
And that's when I upvoted; such a potentially positive statement in this situation takes a 180 into creep/chill territory.
'Dr. Eriksson: I apologize. I didn't mean to intend that there was anything wrong with it. I'm just curious as to the mechanics.'
I believe that 'intend' should be 'intimate'.
What.
No, seriously, what.
"Insinuate", yes, that works, but "intimate" most certainly does not. Because "intimate" is not a verb.
Insinuate is what I was looking for. Danke schon.
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intimate (third-person singular simple present intimates, present '''Intimate''', verb; participle intimating, simple past and past participle intimated)
*(transitive) To suggest or disclose discreetly.
*He intimated that we should leave before the argument escalated.
That said - what would happen if we hooked this up to someone in a vegetative state?
Same thing as if they weren't, I think.
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I'm really bothered by this one, because it feels internally inconsistent.
Testing has shown that, in instances in which SCP-1868 claims to be passing on messages or describing the activities of a subject, the knowledge and communications that it conveys are accurate representations of the subject's knowledge and of its behavior. The exception to this is the subject's supposed relationship with SCP-1868, which SCP-1868 will claim as reality even in cases where the subject is highly unlikely to become romantically involved with any entity. Attempts to communicate directly with the subject are discouraged, as using SCP-1868 in this manner results in a drastic increase in brain activity indicative of fear, along with activity that indicates dishonesty on the part of the subject.
Attempts to remove SCP-1868 from any subject will result in SCP-1868 becoming highly distressed and angry at the party(s) responsible. Prior to complete removal, SCP-1868 will electrocute the subject via a mechanism that is not fully understood, causing death in all recorded cases.
If every attempt to remove it results in death, how do we have even the slightest idea that what it's conveying to us is accurate? Not mentioning this would actually, I feel, improve the attempt to convey the weird abusive-coma-relationship. As it is, these portions make it impossible for me to buy into because this makes no sense.
If every attempt to remove it results in death, how do we have even the slightest idea that what it's conveying to us is accurate?
Like this:
"SCP-1868, what does Claire like to do on rainy days?"
*checks answer against interviews with D-class prior to start of testing, notes accuracy*
"And where did she go to elementary school?"
*Continues in this manner down the extensive list of personal information and observed behaviors*
It's also explicitly said that they know it isn't being completely honest, despite apparently having access to the person's memories and being able to correctly report things like mannerisms. It's strongly hinted through the article that what it's doing is the mental equivalent of a stalker kidnapping the target of their fixation and chaining them in their basement.
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