kicked Researcher ████████ to the groin and sprinted from the room
Probably that "to" was meant to be an "in"?
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(account deleted)I swear I've seen this before.
No vote. Will be back with a critique later.
I submitted it a few months back when it was half-finished, bad idea. Been though a major rewrite now and I think it should do better.
Edit: Can't wait. Everything helps.
This has a very similar effect to SCP-1409, although its original form apparently pre-dates that article.
Yeah, I can see the similarities but I think it's certainly different enough overall. The original version of this article was from April 22nd, a few weeks before SCP-1409 was submitted.
Edit: http://scp-wiki.wikidot.com/forum/t-468180/scp-1409#post-1447492
I don't really think the Foundation would be willing to risk spreading the effect by letting samples go. Unless the trackers were attatched to the shoes instead of the animals, there's too much of a risk of the objects being washed up on beaches.
Also, the recovery log makes it seem like the foundation heard about a shoe washing up on a beach and immediately sent an MTF. I sounds kind of silly.
Plus, is the 4 meter zone a sphere? Because then they'd probably stop people from using the rooms above and below.
Really good points, thank you!
I took out the part about the dog being released because I agree it seems too risky. However, I think it's reasonable the Foundation would assume the samples almost 3000km away from land wouldn't wash back up on beaches. I actually think it adds to the creepiness a bit because of the small chance that the contagion could have breached containment without the Foundation's knowledge.
Edit: I updated the SCP to be partially uncontained. Thoughts?
I added to the recovery backstory, tell me what you think.
I also nerfed the effect radius to 2 meters (for simplicity's sake, let's assume the locker is on the ground floor).
I was bordering on "meh" because the idea didn't really do anything for me, but then I got to that audio file and it scared the living shit out of me. +1, +1 hard.
Haha, thanks. Sorry the article didn't do much for you but I'm glad the audio file worked. I spent a while editing the unidentified underwater sound recording known as "Train", which the original version scared the shit out of me too. More info about the sound if you're interested.
I don't know, there's some scarier sounds out there. Like Julia, which in my opinion is the scariest unknown deep sea sound.
the recovery of SCP-1667-1 from █████ Beach and in the resulting chaos, [DATA EXPUNGED].
This expunged portion felt jarring to me. Almost anything could have occurred in the expunged area, which is why it's better not to expunge the end of paragraphs, as there isn't enough context clues to infer the nature of the events.
There's also a little too much expunged material in the last log, and it's difficult to read when constantly having to go over blanks in the structure.
The audio log didn't add much, and seemed like a desperate tie-in to the SCP about, well, shoes. I won't question the connection between a shoe contagion and the Pacific Ocean, but trying to connect it with a dull audio log and a mysterious underwater creature is both a stretch and a letdown. I also have a problem with the laziness of the Foundation in Log 02/12. They just presume this object is destroyed? It could wash up on a beach in Hawaii or Japan, and then we could have an outbreak on our hands.
It's a bit subtle but it's implied that at least three members of the MTF drowned through "Black combat boot, owner deceased". I'd appreciate any suggestions to improve the expunged parts in general though.
The audio file was just intended as an interesting climax to the article. The last experiment log is supposed to explain the entire point of the SCP's effect, that the victims are being led to a living creature, not just the ocean. Any suggestions to make that seem like less of a stretch?
I agree about the objects being destroyed. "Lost" or "unrecoverable" would be better words to use. Maybe changing the whole article to say that the SCP is partially uncontained would work better?
So originally I was reading this article on my phone. The picture is obviously very small on the phone, so while this article's picture more clearly looks like a ratty shoe, on the phone it looked more like a pile of dog feces.
I wasn't really sure and couldn't be bothered to zoom in and figure it out, so I figured I would start reading the article, which would make it clear to me if it really was dog feces or not. Then the article started talking about shoes, and I thought to myself "oh my god, someone actually wrote an article about anomalous dog s%@t!"
Fortunately, not long into the description section that idea was dispelled. However, I would like to say that if anyone would like to create an SCP about anomalous dog poops that get stuck on your shoe, you're more than welcome to the idea.
"oh my god, someone actually wrote an article about anomalous dog s%@t!"
I actually laughed out loud at that and got an angry glare from a room mate who was trying to sleep.
Anyway, when I first looked at the picture, I got the distinct impression that this was inspired by the shoes containing feet (sans rest of the body) that kept washing up on shore in British Columbia a few years back. A tad tasteless (basing an SCP on actual missing people), but a solid idea nonetheless.
The dog shit would make a good -J, though there's already a fecal -J out there.
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You know, that may be an idea…a lawn where dog poop always appears, no matter the measures to keep dogs out. I don't know.
I don't really get this SCP. It's a contagion that spreads between shoes and makes people go to a certain spot in the ocean before vanishing. It's somehow related to a giant creature.
Remind me of http://www.scp-wiki.net/scp-1409 but I like 1409 a lot more. :/
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