July 5th, 1975 / Discussion

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Perelka_L 29 Jan 2018 19:09

The thing about domino effect is that you're supposed to see where the pieces falling are falling and what is their direction. Or not. Bodies of gods are heavy, but what follows can be worse. Or yes.

A mix of class 76 and two weird unholy beings. Tread carefully.

Thanks go for SunnyClockwork, Soulless, Zyn and taylor_itkin for taking a look.

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toastedraptor 29 Jan 2018 19:19

Leans too heavily on the material it references and doesn't work as a standalone piece. Downvote.

Shaggydredlocks 29 Jan 2018 20:07

I think I wouldve enjoyed this a lot more if I didn't have to go to the page source to read half of it.

A more abstract focus on music and memory would have been preferable for me, for the plain text portions, rather than the second-person narrative bits tethered to an individual succumbing to an anomaly via internet search and idly shuffling off to their doom. Strong opening, and I quite like the final line, as well as the fifthist tie-in, but the aforementioned elements weakened it for me.

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Perelka_L 29 Jan 2018 20:18

Selecting text maybe could help?

The person was never affected by anomaly until the last paragraph (when the lake, ahem, changed ownership) but other than that I see more or less understand what you mean. Thank you.