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Announcement is now up, I just put up the page first and then went to go announce.
Also, inaugural SCP. Fingers crossed…
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I like your writing but we already have an SCP like this.
SCP-1209 to be exact.
I think this one's different enough from 1209 to stand on its own. 1209 is a congenital defect common to a particular area that allows/forces the bearers to see through someone else's eye. This one is an artificial eye that implants itself, and may or may not be broadcasting what's being seen, it's location, or anything else to… Somewhere.
Pretty good, especially for a first article. And even if a similar object exists, I see no reason why we cant have two similar objects if it isnt derivative and theyre both well written.
Whether you like it or not, history is on our side. We will bury you!
When not fully retracted, bristles composed mainly of copper extrude from a 0.25-cm2 area directly opposite the object's "pupil".
When I first read this I though it meant "when the eyeball is not fully retracted". Not sure how to make it clearer. Maybe "When they are not fully retracted"?
male Asiatic
female Negroid
That should be "Asian" and "African", not "Asiatic" and "Negroid".
I like this. One little nitpick: D-1078-2 is a bit young at age 24 for cataract surgery. Also, the word "botched" is a little informal; maybe "failed" surgery or "cataract surgery complicated by infection". Otherwise, very good and upvoted.
I like this and honestly I think it's sufficiently different from SCP-1209 to remain here. However, the writing feels off in places and I'm having difficulties coming to terms with the wall of text. I think this could be written up a lot more concise (though I won't say I know exactly how or where to edit). No vote for now, but I'll gladly upvote if this gets cleaned up a bit.
Also, congratulations to the author and a promising first article.
I noticed a small error:
In the article, you state
However, subject D-1078-8 reported vivid auditory and visual hallucinations; it is believed now that during the late stages of SCP-1078-1's integration, it not only blocks out all stimuli from humans but also creates false stimuli in the mind of its host. Subjects that are not terminated invariably take their own life, either directly out of despair or by desperately trying to wrench SCP-1078-1 out of their eye socket and dying to the resulting cranial hemorrhage. Subject D-1078-8 was prevented from suicide, but after a period of 15 years expired due to [DATA EXPUNGED].
I think you mean D-1078-13? Since D-1078-8 didn't even survive the *implantation* process.
The subjects were just numbered starting at zero and counting up, not numbered after their experiment. D-1078-7 was used in both experiments 7 and 8, and experiments 9-12 were on animal subjects, so the subject of experiment 13 was the eighth D-Class personnel used, hence why he's D-1078-8.
A few bits of spell/grammar/specifics checking aside, I think this is a really solid article. And yes we've had eye-related SCPs before, but if THAT level of similarity was the end-all-be-all of judgement, well then we'd have 173 and NO other statues on the site… And we have quite a few statues.
And yes, me and my sensitive eyes were cringing, especially with the log of the guy who had it implanted *over his own, still-quite-functional eye*. Shudder, man. Shudder.
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