New SCP
This is my first attempt at an SCP, and I would appreciate any thoughts on it. I figure it has more than a few flaws, and any criticism would be appreciated. Thank you all in advance.
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(account deleted)This is a really cool idea but just not quiet there, for me. I really think it would benefit from a more clinical, formal tone when describing the effects and experiments, and more specificity all around, such as in descriptions like "therapy as in cases of depression" and so and so.
I agree with vezaz, but I'm not completely sold on the idea itself yet. You should start by proofreading again and filling in some of the expungements and redactions. They're very distracting. The biggest issue, however, is that your article implies that the badge is allowed outside of SCP facilities, contradictory with the mission of the organization (or maybe I'm missing something - "Actions" listing robbery seem to indicate a release into the non-Foundation world).
Why does the addendum require level 4 clearance? Dont the researchers need that information to do…research?
EDIT: Very much improved. Good job. +1.
Whether you like it or not, history is on our side. We will bury you!
It bugs me that it does two different things:
1) It turns you into a sociopath while wearing it .
2) Sometimes when it's removed, it implants memories of crimes which were (or will be) committed by other people.
Also, is there any reason that the Foundation hasn't at least tried to use amnesiacs on the subjects? I mean, maybe amnesiacs don't work on SCP-1339 related memories, or maybe it doesn't erase the overwhelming feelings of guilt, but I'd think that the Foundation would at least try.
I can't bring myself to like this.
Living the dream, or dreaming the life?
Why is the last D-class' duration a Director? It's not clear whether a D-class was made director or vice versa.
Okay, I actually read through it now, and dear God. I really overdid it with the [DATA EXPUNGED]. I appreciate the criticism, and have edited and revised a portion of it. Thank you all.
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