I'm not real happy with the formatting, but I wasn't entirely sure how to handle it. I'm also not entirely sure of the language used in the containment procedures or description, so any help, suggestions, and even edits are very much appreciated.
The tone of the containment procedures seems good in a ridiculous way. No complaints there.
Too much [REDACTED] and [DATA EXPUNGED] in SCP-XXXX-B's report. While I understand that you want to keep the identity of whatever freakish thing was inside the bear a mystery and what it did to the researcher a mystery, it's just very hard to understand what's happening. One idea is that you can replace the creature inside SCP-XXXX-B with SCP-████, still keeping it deliberately vague while also adding some coherency.
Example.
SCP-XXXX-B: Discovered by a team of researchers in the cafeteria of Site 24 on ██/██/████. Subject looked nearly identical to SCP-XXXX, but moved slowly and irregularly, with jerky motions. The team reported that it appeared as if something was moving inside of SCP-XXXX-B. Subject made no attempt to interact at first, until a burst in its seams revealed what appeared to be the hand and arm of SCP-████ poking out and grasping at the air. At this point, one female researcher screamed, and SCP-XXXX-B reacted by emitting a high pitched cry similar to that of SCP-████. The subject then attempted to [DATA EXPUNGED]. In the ensuing chaos, the security team was forced to terminate both the researcher and SCP-XXXX-B. Therapy sessions with the surviving members of the research team have made little progress. Approximately 3 hours after this incident, Dr. ██████ was found unconscious and bleeding in [REDACTED]. [DATA EXPUNGED] had been performed on her while she was sleeping, and SCP-████ was never found. It is hypothesized that SCP-XXXX used [DATA EXPUNGED] to create SCP-XXXX-B. Information regarding the possible origin of SCP-XXXX-B is not to be leaked to the research team members currently undergoing therapy for the incident with SCP-XXXX-B, as Dr. Carver believes it would be extremely detrimental to their recovery.
If I misunderstood your intent, then don't take this suggestion seriously, but try to at least make it a bit easier to read through all the censored information.
Yeah, it might not be clear now what my intent was. Originally I had less of the incident censored, and the part regarding the Dr. being found unconscious and bleeding was not censored out at all. I wasn't sure if having one part censored, but the 2nd part completely censor-free would be considered inconsistent.
I'll try putting it back to where I originally had it, and see what people think. If anyone is interested, this is what Boulder Smolder is talking about:
Discovered by a team of researchers in the cafeteria of Site 24 on ██/██/████. Subject looked nearly identical to SCP-XXXX, but moved slowly and irregularly, with jerky motions. The team reported that it appeared as if something was moving inside of SCP-XXXX-B. Subject made no attempt to interact at first, until a burst in its seams revealed what appeared to be the hand and arm of a [REDACTED] poking out and grasping at the air. At this point, one female researcher screamed, and SCP-XXXX-B reacted by emitting a high pitched cry similar to that of a [REDACTED]. The subject then attempted to [DATA EXPUNGED]. In the ensuing chaos, the security team was forced to [REDACTED] both the researcher and SCP-XXXX-B. Therapy sessions with the surviving members of the research team have made little progress. Approximately 3 hours after this incident, Dr. ██████ was found unconscious and bleeding in [REDACTED]. [DATA EXPUNGED] had been performed on her while she was sleeping, and [REDACTED] was never found. It is hypothesized that SCP-XXXX used [DATA EXPUNGED] to create SCP-XXXX-B. Information regarding the possible origin of SCP-XXXX-B is not to be leaked to the research team members currently undergoing therapy for the incident with SCP-XXXX-B, as Dr. Carver believes it would be extremely detrimental to their recovery.
Psycho-Bear meets Teddy Ruxpin, hmm. the idea of these crawling through the air ducts is working for me. There are a lot of little things that need cleanup, clinical tone, brevity, etc.
I did a little bit of cleanup last night on some things that I read over and didn't care for. There are glaring spots in the description that I can tell just don't quite hold the clinical tone of an SCP report, but I don't really have enough experience yet to figure out how to change them. Any specific suggestions are appreciated.
The thing is Keter because it can replicate itself, right? In that case, shouldn't Site 24 be under lockdown, to make sure it doesn't sneak out?
This is a really good first attempt. Very creepy and I concer, I would not want to run into any of these things in a dark enclosed space. Clean up the article a little bit and its good to go. Maybe want a creepier picture. The one you have is a little bit too cute, although an even cuter one might work just as well.
I might rewrite it a bit, and not have it running lose. Perhaps have them destroy the first 3 creations after sustaining casualties, containing the original SCP, and perhaps do some controlled experiments where they give the bear different materials to understand how it creates things. Then maybe do some testing of their affects on D-Class before destroying the creations…
To be fair, part of what scared the shit out of me about this was the fact that the SCP was not contained and its creations were nowhere to be found. I really like this it's creepy as hell. However I do agree that the censoring is a little rampant.