SCP proposal--feedback welcome

SCP proposal--feedback welcome

PolkaFace99 29 Jan 2012 06:20

Here's my first proposed SCP. I'd like to hear what you think of it.

http://sandbox.scp-wiki.net/polkaface99

The basic idea is that migraines suck, and migraines due to hormonal changes suck… but migraines that have an uncontrollable, palpable, destructive effect would suck even worse, especially if you don't know why, or how to stop them.

Last edited on 29 Jan 2012 06:25 by PolkaFace99 Show more

Re: SCP proposal--feedback welcome

Dr Hendra 30 Jan 2012 03:42

Rather than keeping her conscious like that, why not submerge her into persistent vegetative state? That way, it consume less resource because we don't have to pay cook to prepare meal when transfusion of sugar water and other necessary nutrient would do, no episode so no furnishing is damage (as far as I gather, it only happens when the subject is conscious during an episode). Hell, this way it don't need furnishing.

Well, there's a lot of SCPs that cause decay to things around it, most prominent are 073 or 804. There's some potential in this entry, but you'll really have to work hard to make this thing unique.

EDIT: removed the In Character tag.

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Re: SCP proposal--feedback welcome

AdminBright 30 Jan 2012 06:15

There is no need to post in character.

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Re: SCP proposal--feedback welcome

Agent Angus Smith 29 Jan 2012 16:32

I am glad you didn't use the term 'killer migraine' I kind of like this one, it seems refreshingly different. I would reduce the description of the woman to gender and age. It needs more to make it really work. Wait a few days (or longer) and get feedback from veterans, they might be able to be more helpful.

Re: SCP proposal--feedback welcome

PolkaFace99 29 Jan 2012 19:56

Okay, I've pared down the physical description to the essentials. What else can I do to improve this one?

Re: SCP proposal--feedback welcome

Agent Angus Smith 29 Jan 2012 20:58

I would suggest "female, age 52". There are a lot of Caucasians, I have read rants about it. Either don't mention it or change it.

Test logs would help.

flesh decays as normal, causing severe pain and often death to the creature in question

Researchers would measure it and provide info -distance, decay rate, rate of expansion, etc.