SCP-3433

Summary:

Second attempt. Please critique?

SCP-3433

Winterfront 07 Nov 2017 23:42

http://scpsandbox2.wikidot.com/scp-3433

I don't know why my username is on the title. Go figure.

Previously, someone had told me that my SCP needed a "Why" for its existence or something. Like it needed a purpose. I tried to fix my writing in that manner, but I'm not entirely sure if I succeeded in doing so.

Also, it looks a bit confusing with the large amounts of writing, so I'd like to also know if it's not clear what my idea is.

Also anything else that you guys have a problem with. I'm the noob.

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Don't pay any attention to what they write about you. Just measure it in inches.

Re: SCP-3433

Winterfront 07 Nov 2017 23:42

Also I do have pictures, so I can get those in at some point.
I do have pictures now.

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Don't pay any attention to what they write about you. Just measure it in inches.

Last edited on 08 Nov 2017 00:03 by Winterfront Show more

Pretty Good

DrainedWell 11 Nov 2017 23:56

I mean it's better than mine.

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Modern_Erasmus 12 Nov 2017 00:08

Dr Paki, this critique is functionally useless and unhelpful. It says absolutely nothing about this draft, its issues, or how to improve it. Do not post low quality critique such as this in this forum.