My first SCP Foundation Tale!
Thanks to Bright for the suggestion I write a story about this particular SCP!
I'm happy with the story, and I hope you like it, ladies and gents. :D
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… I have absolutely no recollection of having read this tale. Fuck I'm getting old.
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I've done everything I can short of smashing it with an industrial pr
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Smashing it with an industrial press caused severe damage to the press. I am now short fifty dollars to pay for the damages.
Dohohohoho
They encounter space aliens, and manage to get their way back home.
This line jumped out at me, were we saying "space aliens" in 1902? Maybe "extra-terrestrial beings", or "a race of moon-dwellers" would fit better.
Regardless, upvoting.
Alien meaning pretty much the same as 'foreign'- however, nowadays alien has become synonymous with space as foreign has become synonymous with a different part of earth
I'll be honest, I was expecting this to be a "Tesla caused the Tunguska event, only it's SCP-powered" story. Instead, I was pleasantly surprised to learn he electro-lasered MARS.
Well written, and a nice way to twist on expectations. +1
That's EXACTLY what I was thinking! It's like he was building that up with all the talk of forests, and out of nowhere comes something even bigger and more shocking.
Well, when Tesla mentioned his "death ray" that would make war obsolete, he reportedly claimed it would be able to score the face of Mars… Besides, Spider Robinson already did the "Tesla caused the Tunguska event" thing in one of his Callahan's stories.
I liked the fact that the writer was aware of Tesla's pigeon fixation. :)
Tesla claims the men were killed by being vaporized, but the reality is worse.
The resonance from the event literally shook them apart, atom by atom.
Tesla is one of my heroes, of course I'd know about his pigeons. XD
Lasering Mars is exactly the kind of thing that Tesla would WANT to do.
This is an excellent little story. Upvoted for awesomeness.
I like this. Only one problem, though: If the part that mentions an elephant is referring to Topsy's execution via AC, that didn't happen until 1903, whereas the entry is dated 1901.
Gah! Damn.
I knew I had a timeline error in there.
Can I chalk it up to artistic license? x_x
I really like this, with the caveat that I thought "[The remainder of the page has been smeared with tears.]" was a bit melodramatic. Could just be me, though.
As always, I'm trying to improve my writing.
Thank you for your critique, I'll be sure to tone things like that down in the future!
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