Contest entry for SCP-1000.
This is also the first (non-rewrite) SCP article I've ever posted. I'd say be gentle, but… that's exactly what I don't want. Tell me exactly what you think of this. Any and all feedback is welcomed.
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This a genuine example of a good SCP (unlike mine, I might add), it's catchy, and well-formulated.
Dr. Luciel Shrewed
As I've already said, the humans rebelling and taking over is just too much like the Planet of the Apes. Except with humans in the place of the apes.
And with the 1000 contest entrys, I've decided to either upvote or downvote. Instead of not voting like I do with some SCPs.
So I'm afraid it's a downvote from me.
Although the Planet of the Apes similarity does detract, this is still different enough to keep me interested in its own way. So you do indeed get an upvote from me. If this does not succeed as an article I'd like to see this as a Foundation tale.
This might be similar to the planet of the apes, however it still is brilliant as an "explanation" of Bigfoot etc.
Furthermore.. what about (in foundation lore) the Planet of the Apes movie originating FROM the remembered knowledge of the oppression of Homo sapiens sapiens by this species?
Except the scenario was censored by the foundation, substituting our technology for the one these possessed as a part of containment. (well, what if there are some forgotten organic machines, and seeing something dangerously similar to it makes people more likely to notice?)
Yes, i have seen Thundercats just yesterday.
Dude you forgot the Yowie, don't forget the aussie Bigfoot.
Edit: Anyway besides that I personally like it but I know you can do more so keep it up. I'm still upvoting because I love the story article.
As an SCP, this is weak, because the one story addendum is carrying the entire article. It's a good two thirds of the total length, and as well written as it is, this doesn't really feel like any of the other SCP proposals.
I'd like this better as SCP-001 where there's no real expectation of a set format, and I'd like it better as a Foundation Tale. I'm sure this'll stay positive, but the formatting throws me off too much to like it. Regretful downvote.
This feels like a great Foundation Tale hammered into the shape of a so-so SCP. Neutral vote.
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I would really prefer if the story bit was drafted in the style and tone of regular SCP description, rather than as a short story. But YMMV.
I laughed out loud when I read about Bigfoot the SCP, and honestly, I pretty much lost it at bushes into vehicles. The mental image of Bigfoot in a flying car will never stop being funny…and then that last bit comes, and you manage to utterly annhilate any last trace of humor I felt in the preceding paragraphs…
Well done.
Upvoted.
Is the last little tidbit at the end supposed to be heartwarming or horrific?
I'm not doing so hot on figuring it out D:
Is the last little tidbit at the end supposed to be heartwarming or horrific?
Well, I didn't intend for it to be heartwarming… o_o;
Well, forgivening was what led me to my incorrect conclusion.
Care to shine light upon my ignorance? D:
Well, it's not necessarily an incorrect conclusion. However, I meant those three lines to imply a threat (whether it's intentional or not in-universe is a speculative exercise). "You have a choice now, but you won't have that choice forever."
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