SCP Idea: Auto Immune System

SCP Idea: Auto Immune System

Isolated_Colony 25 Jul 2011 22:11

Hey,

I'm new to the site and wanted to see if this idea would be good enough to make the cut. The SCP info can be found at: http://sandbox.scp-wiki.net/isolated-colony

Basically its a chemically based immune system that consumes a huge amount of energy. Late stage individuals begin to secrete the chemicals which attack everything not identified as belonging to "self".

Thanks for taking the time to read the entry over and for any constructive advice on improvements.

Re: SCP Idea: Auto Immune System

thedeadlymoose 27 Jul 2011 17:24

Couple notes:

I can't really believe that an agent used the bottle of hand soap while searching for an SCP.

Some awkward sentence structures make this more difficult to read. Actually, the main problem with this is that it makes my brain scream when I try to read it for too long. You might want to add proper formatting (bolding "Special Containment Procedures", "Description", etc) and it's possible a picture would help.

Besides that, from what I can tell, the idea has potential… maybe. It also seems kinda like it's just OTT hand sanitizer, which is a bit of a cliche and thus might be more difficult to pull off, especially as a first SCP.