http://scpsandboxwiki.wikidot.com/onetruesolipsist
So, what do you think?
I had a few different inspirations here, and the idea is to have an SCP that horrifies on two different levels: being exposed to the SCP, and being the SCP.
http://scpsandboxwiki.wikidot.com/onetruesolipsist
So, what do you think?
I had a few different inspirations here, and the idea is to have an SCP that horrifies on two different levels: being exposed to the SCP, and being the SCP.
Sounds like an X man. I would downvote.
Also.
Subject weighs 452 kilograms and has no outstanding physical characteristics
Think about that for a second.
this kinda looks like you went down the checklist of cliches and said "okay her superpower is a nice voice and everyone wants to bang her, BUT she'll be enormously fat AND be depressed by her containment! genius!"
just kinda meh. but humanoids aren't really my bag
Let me reply to the lovely crackles in order to expand on a point I keep trying to hammer into the wiki.
I often see new writers attempting to write humanoid SCP objects or just interesting characters fall into a sad pit of poor technique I'm gonna call rhinestone syndrome. They write what feels like an overempowered character, and attempt to downplay or cancel out the power by giving that character a series of "flaws".
Let me stress to everyone reading this post that that is a terrible way to write.
You see, bad ideas are bad ideas. When you attempt to downplay a bad idea by tacking other ideas onto it, you simply wind up writing a bad concept with extraneous stuff attached. As it is written, "roll dog shit in rhinestones and all you've made is a mess." Worse yet, it's always (no exceptions) painfully obvious to readers that the "downsides" exist solely to cover up the concept flaw, and that obviousness serves to highlight the original flaw. It actually makes things worse.
I mention this in this thread because this is the second superpowered fat woman we've seen spurted onto the wiki in about a month. This is a classic example of the rhinestone syndrome I mentioned. By making the SCP grossly overweight, the author hopes to compensate for the fact that he's given her what amounts to a direct line into other characters sex drives. It really, really, really doesn't work.
EDIT: Apparently the weight thing was a typo, but I'm leaving this up because I think I made a good point and am proud of me.
I didn't mean to make the SCP overweight. It was a typo. It was supposed to be 45.2 kilograms, not 452.
Glorious.
I'd still downvote, but that's a pretty funny typo.
The idea, BTW, wasn't "make a OMG HAWT SCP!! and then give it a flaw", it was to have a "lure" for the SCP's real strange quality, the fact that people who the SCP has sex with are absorbed into her. It's based on the myth of the siren combined with an anglerfish's reproductive cycle.
okay, so, hideously underweight is still a flaw too
and not at all attractive
right
right
It's not supposed to be underweight either. Did I convert to metric wrong?
Well, more pressingly the attempt to make her depressed is an attempted flaw, and my earlier post still applies.
Additionally, it's a flaw that's been done before on the wiki by SCP-105, and I'm told by fans that it also applies to SCP-085. So.
So, should I take that out? Or just scrap the idea?
I would scrap the idea, were I you. Particularly in light of your post up there:
to have a "lure" for the SCP's real strange quality, the fact that people who the SCP has sex with are absorbed into her.
That's uh…
Well. I'll say it's been done before, and also that such things are generally deleted quickly.
But, it's entirely up to you. Remember, there are no penalties for failure. If you post a poorly recieved article, it's eligible for deletion as soon as it falls below -5. Once it's deleted, no one will remember it ever existed. So there's nothing to worry about if you feel confident enough in your writing's ability to carry the article.
I will say that anglerfish breeding is good creep fuel if properly applied. Seeking proper inspiration is an important step in writing SCP articles. I don't think this is the way to implement that particular inspiration, however. As a general rule, humanoid SCP objects based on sex are a bad plan.
hey, it works for 540.
can't recall any other items making use of that concept though, deleted or otherwise.
Anglerfish breeding as an inspiration is where the idea started, and I was thinking there would be a certain horror factor in applying that to a human.
But if it's been done before the way I was imagining, without significant alterations, then I don't want to use it.
I was kinda worried that paranormal compulsion sort of things were overdone, anyways.