I'm still sad that it's invisible instead of angry, but I understand, and like it nonetheless.
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At first I was like :| then I saw "active camouflage" and I :< by 
EchoFourDelta, 14 Mar 2011 21:38
The picture is amazing, but the actual article is just kinda meh. It's a cool nonexistant animal, but it's really much too likeable to make a good SCP. To quote the general tips section of the how to write:
You should always aim to create something that scares the living daylights out of people, not something cool. If you think, "Huh, I'd like to have this SCP", you're doing it wrong. If the knowledge this object is in your house doesn't make you jump out the window into the garden a story below, you're probably doing it wrong.
I agree with yoric: that picture is amazing, but the article is lacking. It reminds me too much of 966 with the invisibility, though I think the fact that they aren't aggressive could be on to something if you bump up the effects or something along those lines.
The original concept had them going into a rage state and killing everything in sight if startled, stranger, friend, or foe. Chat consensus was that invisibility or rage state was good but both might be too much. Reading it over again I still don't really think both would have been too much….but I think I would go a creep route with this instead, expounding on the singing, making them not quite so friendly in the end as they seem…
Okay, here's an idea.
They benefit from having humans sleep, because that's when they get essential micronutrients. You know the gunk that's in the corners of your eyes sometimes when you wake up, but not other times?
They eat that. They lick your eyes while you sleep and consume the congealed sleep-guck.
If you slept really well and your eyes feel clear… it's because one of these creatures came and sat over you while you slept…
and licked your eyes.
SLRP SLRP SLRP SLRP
I find that adds to their charm and usefulness. Set up a sleep salon for those with a measure of bravery.
From the chat, a good suggestion theme:
Rights> Maybe they eat all sorts of waste off the body
* Aelanna hugs Rights
<Voct> if you open your eyes too quickly, they might accidentally lick your eyeballs
<Rights> They gently suckle the oil from your hair
* Dodridge watches.
<Rights> And brush the dead, dry skin off your fingers and feet
<Rights> Sometimes, if they're startled, they might scratch you a little bit, or bump you
<PureLocke> really they are like a natural grooming service
<Rights> Or suckle too hard
<Voct> yes
<Voct> they mean well
<Rights> Which is why you get bruises and cuts during the night for no goddamn reason
<Rights> They just sometimes get a little hungry and give you a hicky
Additional Ideas that people seem to think would improve this article, making it more unnerving.
Much more unnerving.
God damn you all.
Also:
<Rights> Maybe not all pimples, but do you ever get popped pimples while you sleep?
<Rights> When you were a gross, pimply teenager, that ever happen to you?
<PureLocke> nope
<Rights> They prod and poke those *delicious, pus-filled little pustules*
<Rights> THey LOVE teenagers
What's here already I have no opinion on. But all this stuff… Holy crap.
(Disclaimer: I'm new here.)
It's not a bad idea, but it needs something more. Any of those gross body-waste-eating ideas would work wonderfully. As it stands, it's not very interesting.
I think the article is on the long side for how much content there is, particularly the description section. It could really use some tightening up.
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