This seems alright. I'd take out the part about it corroding its container for no apparent reason, as A LOT of SCPs do that. In fact, one was just posted and has a -8 rating. I love the connection to the quote at the end, though.
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SCP-339 constantly produces an aerosolized corrosive compound which is so far unidentifiable due to the rate of molecular breakdown. This gradually degrades any container SCP-339 is placed into, necessitating a double-box approach to containment, consisting of a sound-proofed room and sound-proofed box. The box should be constructed of a specialized zinc-cadmium alloy (339-CA08T), which has proven to be the most resistant against SCP-339's corrosion. This box must be replaced monthly to maintain containment. All work must be done in absolute silence.
Not only does this make me dislike the article immensely, but it belongs in the containment procedures section.
i like it a lot, though i feel 8db is a bit too quiet. you cant even breathe quieter than that, it would nearly constantly be attacking random air movements in a room. which might be part of its Keter-ness i'm sure, just saying…i'd double that, 16 db would still be quieter than you're able to walk. otherwise great work. and yoric has a point, that part does belong in the containment protocols section.
To both you and yoric. I removed the constant corrosion (which is a little overdone) and replaced it with simple constant abrasive movement on the part of the SCP. Hopefully this fixes the cliche problem.
oh, no, i liked the corrosion part, just that that section needed moving :P having it damaging its own box makes sense though
I like it, although the wording needs some work. You made a few typos, but I see Rhett's fixing them.
Hmm. I gotta say that I love the picture and I like the basic concept. There are things I would like to be different but it is good enough as it is.
I'm always open to suggestions to make things creepier.
Actually the creep factor is solid, I think you nailed that already with the recovery log from Iran.
I guess I'd prefer it if the thing wasn't actively trying to tentacle rape you if you made noise near it. Let it keep prowling around in its box trying to dig and corrode its way out but its danger should be a little less Run Up And Kill You. Maybe it amplifies the sounds it hears exponentially such that things that are moving or speaking in its presence destroy themselves instead of getting pierced by all the wires.
It's your call, as it is I still think it's vote worthy.
Damn, that is better, and now that you've said tentacle raped I can't get it out of my head. I'm going to have to figure out a different way to have it kill (and I'll probably go with yours), but I'm going to leave the part about it extruding blood and viscera after it kills. I liked that part alot.
I like the blood part too, no problem there. In fact it is a handy clue about its prior containment, its old chamber seemed pretty clean (or at least hard to clean), so it wasn't something that a powerful man owned as a status symbol or handy way to disappear people.
I always like the transition of these dangerous artifacts being held back or otherwise dealt with in an almost religious sort of way, being hidden away in dark rooms on fancy pedestals before the Foundation shows up and says "Fuck that! Let's put it in a box!"
If you do go the amplification route I'd recommend saying it amplifies kinetic energy so that tiny motions overreact and sounds amplify in some way that a noisy person or object would basically tear itself apart.
Ugh, picture being stuck before this thing knowing what it does, and your heart starts to thunder, and then that gets louder and harder and you start to shake and …
In terms of things that ___ to death, "vibrate you with rebar" is definitely a first for that blank. Not bad.
slurry of bone and muscle tissue
Put me off my split pea soup.
Upvoted.
Living the dream, or dreaming the life?
what were you doing eating split pea soup anyway? ugh. this article did you a favor.
I /like/ split pea soup. The thicker the better.
Living the dream, or dreaming the life?
Overall, I like it. One minor quibble:
It is 53 cm from tip-to-tip, although this is variable.
This feels a little awkward. 53 cm strikes me as oddly precise for a measure stated to be variable. I assume that it's variable because the tendrils move and coil in different configurations? If that's the case, I might suggest something along the lines of either "It is 53 cm from tip-to-tip with tendrils fully extended" or possibly "It is approximately 50 cm from tip-to-tip, although this is variable."
Just a quick question about containment, keep what it does and how they contain it physically, but why wouldn't the Foundation simply vent all the air out of the room, or as much as they can, since it would be harder for sound to travel in a vacuum. Even a partial one.
Quick thing: Copper doesn't rust. It corrodes and gains a layer of some sort of copper oxide, in this case verdigris. Only ferrous metals rust.
I think the intention was "rusted" copper, i.e., copper that appears to be rusted. Nice catch, nonetheless.
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