Please critique my idea
Hi folks! Already ran this past a few in chat and they thought it was an interesting idea. I'd like some more feedback, especially on style and substance, along with the idea itself. It can be found at http://scpsandboxwiki.wikidot.com/dr-case-s-workshop , in the top collapsed entry. If you have time, please check out the next entry listed under DEPRACATED, and let me know how my style is. I take criticism well, and appreciate any comments that could help me to write better.
Thanks a bunch!
