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I enjoyed this. The occasional flashes of 3356 accidentally saying something truthful and then backpedaling were especially good, as was Yang's utter poker face while playing High Priest. The detail that the SCP had had worshippers in New Zealand - decidedly creepy.
I was really intrigued by the SCProcedures consisted of fooling it into thinking containment = worship, and I was looking forward to an interesting conversation to illustrate this relationship/the skip's personality. Instead I was met with a wall-of-text point-for-point backstory that sapped any potential for enjoyment. I stopped caring about the character about halfway through, which isn't a good thing.
Seconding this. I couldn't get through the interview. As it is, it reads like a very good character exercise, but not something that should be public facing.
Didn't like the concept of this SCP, seemed kind of cobbled together. Look it's an xman. Not that there's anything wrong with that but this seemed really… Bland I guess. Good writing but boring SCP.
I feel like the description goes too far in physical detail, it kind of bogs down the stronger parts of the article. It could probably shortened to 3 or less paragraphs. Also, I think it doesn't really need to have flight. The pyrokinetic power makes some sense as an expression of power generation, but I don't see the thematic connection with telekinesis/flight other than it's ability to hold itself together.
I quite like the log and the communist uprising of the mitochondria. It's a surreal and fun idea, kinda reminds me of that sentient flu that acts as a military (crosslink potential there?)
Last thing is some tonal/stylistic issues, I don't think the Foundation would use the term ESP in this context, and "even the best of the Linguistic Department" sounds pretty informal. I think that footnote could rewritten, but I'm not sure how to word it.
The tone of this article strikes me as very unofficial. It sounds more like a pitch of this idea rather than a description of what the item is. Tone is a very hard thing to get down but is nessecary for this kind of thing. Also the idea of it forming a man also strikes me as forced and unnecessary, a mass of mitochondria would be more interesting to me personally.
I think this is awesome, have upvoted hard and disagree with all the negative comments. This could actually become one of my favorite SCPs. Also, it pulls off something I usually hate, which is a story in the interview. I don't know why, it might be just raw good writing.
Not that there's anything wrong with the negative comments, I totally get where they're coming from. But to me this rings true in many levels; it's political, it's personal, it's whimsical. I'm off to Wikipedia to learn more about procaryots and eucaryiots.
THE MITOCHONDRIA WILL NO LONGER BE THE POWERHOUSE OF UNJUST CELLS, COMRADE.
+1.
I would have downvoted this, if not for the occasional hilarious remarks made by the SCP that suggests SCP-3356 was trying very hard to fool itself into believing it was an omnipotent being.
We had shared multiple moments together, like during sports day five solar years ago when, with my support and his wits, we acquired a rather respectable third place for the one hundred meter dash. I am adamant that the other runners were all dishonorable cheats, them - (Pause) What is done is done. No point regretting something I had no control over - no, no that's not right. I was not powerless, it was simply… meant to be! (Pause) Mo - moving on!
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