SCP-2649 / Discussion

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Presenting my newest SCP

GeometryPrime 30 Apr 2017 17:40

Hello! This is my third skip, but it's my first one involving an animal-like anomaly. I frankly rather like this one - writing about something that might be actively hostile, and is actively trying to breach containment, was a nice change from writing about objects that can only kill people if the Foundation screws up.

Anyway, let me know what you all think!

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The image on this page has been borrowed from:

Original Source: http://www.sarahduyer.com/ceramics/
Creator: Sarah Duyer
Permission: http://i.imgur.com/Mj6vYFf.jpg

This image has been edited to remove the pink color from its background.

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Staff Post: Open

Doctor Cimmerian 11 May 2017 22:33

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Removing dead timer. ~ Decibelle

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GeometryPrime 12 May 2017 00:31

What more did I need to do to source this image? I gave credit to the creator, using the quick attribution on the image policy page.

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WrongJohnSilver 12 May 2017 00:41

Yes, but has Sarah Duyer released the image under Creative Commons, or specifically given you permission to use it?

If neither, ask her directly. Many times, someone will be happy to get more exposure and say yes. Make sure you mention that it will be released under Creative Commons if they do say yes.

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GeometryPrime 12 May 2017 01:59

…Oh. I can do that.

Question, if it takes longer than the timer, can I add the image back in if it has been removed?

And how do I cite that? Just copy-paste her response?

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Doctor Cimmerian 12 May 2017 18:44

You can readd it if it takes too long assuming you get permission. Your best bet is a screenshot as proof of permission.

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GeometryPrime 13 May 2017 04:17

Alright. This is really not the best time for me, so I'll probably be readding it.

Thanks!

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Doctor Cimmerian 13 May 2017 19:12

To be perfectly clear, cause I don't want this to be a point of confusion: You can only add the image back after you have permission.

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GeometryPrime 13 May 2017 23:38

Yup.

Out of curiosity, how else would that have been interpreted?

Also: I've sent the message. Awaiting a response now.

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Doctor Cimmerian 14 May 2017 18:04

Image has been edited out until a compliant source can be found.

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GeometryPrime 22 May 2017 19:23

I got a response, and I have a screenshot here.

http://i.imgur.com/Mj6vYFf.jpg

Is this enough to add the image back in?

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ProcyonLotor 22 May 2017 19:29

That is sufficient, thank you!

jjone 30 Apr 2017 17:58

No doubt about the Series I vibe here; I'm reminded of both the Old Man and the Heart of Darkness. Is it nostalgia that you're trying to elicit from the reader? Because there isn't much else here; nothing scary or particularly interesting about the creature. This isn't helped by the fact that everything after the description is redundant. I can't glean anything from the addenda that hasn't been plainly stated in the description.

The exploration log is not nearly extensive enough to provide any potentially interesting insight into the anomaly, so it feels quite bare at the moment and I'm not sure how I'm supposed to react to it as a result.

Overall, this didn't make me feel anything at all; the narrative angle of attempts to breach containment isn't compelling here.

GeometryPrime 30 Apr 2017 18:04

Fair enough; Anything you think I can do to improve it, or is there just not much that can be done at this point?

jjone 30 Apr 2017 18:17

With the exploration log, I was expecting something that would perhaps allude to some of the questions surrounding the anomaly, regarding it being a sentient teapot for instance. The description of the pocket dimension is vivid and is the strong point of the skip for me, with all the strange 'debris' floating around. Perhaps some kind of revealing story could be crafted out of a traditional-style exploration with D-class or drone.

GeometryPrime 30 Apr 2017 18:25

The description of the pocket dimension is vivid and is the strong point of the skip for me, with all the strange 'debris' floating around. Perhaps some kind of revealing story could be crafted out of a traditional-style exploration with D-class or drone.

Really? Honestly, I thought that was the weakest point and considered dropping it.

I might maybe see what I can do about that, but I dunno what you're expecting to find other than random debris. It's a pocket dimension, not the creature's actual innards.

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ratking666 30 Apr 2017 18:39

I can see why some people might turn their heads at this, but seriously, sometimes we need the no-story simple SCP once in a while.

I was glad to help out at least a bit with this.

I like how instead of getting more and more powerful, he's getting more smart, which is always a plus for me.

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pastarasta1 is quick-talking and often scheming

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Communism will win 30 Apr 2017 19:35

Cool stuff. The article is clear, tightly plotted, backed by an interesting concept, and a fourth thing that I forgot. If this is your first SCP, I look forward to your future entries.

Incidentally, this feels like it could easily be adapted into a Stand from JJBA.

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if your reading this your gay

ratking666 30 Apr 2017 19:43

This is his third SCP actually, he has written 2917 and the negative mass weight.

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pastarasta1 is quick-talking and often scheming

GeometryPrime 30 Apr 2017 19:53

Unfortunately (Or perhaps fortunately?) it's not my first - I also wrote SCP-2917 and SCP-2597, so I don't get to hide behind a lack of experience if I write something of low quality.

The latter is probably gonna be my highest rated for a while. Not sure I can top that, actually.

Communism will win 30 Apr 2017 20:18

In my defense, "first" and "third" share the middle sound, so they're basically the same word. <_<

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if your reading this your gay

GeometryPrime 30 Apr 2017 21:26

No offense taken. I'm glad you enjoyed this one!

Scorpion451 30 Apr 2017 21:18

Extradimensional teapot monster.
That's a new one.

I think my favorite thing here is the understated treatment: A weird critter that earned its SCP file not by being extraordinarily dangerous, but because it keeps figuring out new ways to make a nuisance of itself.

+1

TL333s 30 Apr 2017 23:09

It's cute, but it's also kind of "what if 106 was a teapot?"

Honestly, my suggestion would be to give it some personality. Is it mischievous? Is it really trying to kill and eat people with its weird black tea-portal? You could probably get motivation through on another incident log or two. As it stands, it just doesn't have much substance.

GeometryPrime 01 May 2017 00:09

what if 106 was a teapot?

Oh, crap. I didn't even think of that.

Edit: I mean, it kinda isn't though. It doesn't phase through walls, it's non-sapient, not instantly hostile, and this pocket dimension is little more than a stomach rather than 106's playground realm.

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prometheushunter2 29 May 2018 21:35

I’m a little tea pot short and stout
Here is my handle here is my spout
When I get all steamed up here me shout
“Tip me over and pour me-“
Random research barges in: NOOOO!!!!!

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Soultear 12 Apr 2019 03:06

The pitch black stomach dimension idea scares me terribly. Good job. Upvoted

+1

ofree 17 Sep 2023 17:18

I love this. The simplicity really makes it shine. I know some people might complain about a lack of content or a similarity to 106, but the way I see it this is the kind of meat and potatoes SCP that we need to fill out the catalogue and establish that the foundation contains not just world ending horrors but also thousands upon thousands of weird, somewhat hostile objects that would be quite a nuisance if let out.