Trying on my Lovecraft shoes to see if they still fit…this was a random idea I made for a one-off RP event, and ended up getting stuck on it, and fleshing it out more and more. Let me know thoughts and opinions. Had this bouncing around in my head for a while now…
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I dig the idea of sapient stars. The writing is very lovecraftian, and might be a bit unnaprochable to some of our less intellectual readers.
I'd suggest prefacing it with a Foundation addendum detailing a bit more about the circumstances of how this fell into our hands.
I dislike the errors. "It's" in place of "its" is a mark of the lowly people infected with the Internet-wide plague of bad spelling and confusion. And the sentence,
vanishing in to void and oblivion then to know for a moment that such a dreamer existed
is a meaningless jumble without proper grammar.
The helpful thing to do here would be to quietly fix the errors, after PMing the author for permission if you feel your edits will be particularly intensive, rather than unhelpfully posting complaints with a dickish tone in the comments section.
…is a mark of the lowly people infected with the Internet-wide plague of…
this right here is what I mean. You come across as insultingly insinuating that the author, in this case Gears, is a lowly person. I like Gears, as do most of us around here, and my opinion of you suffers for the insinuation.
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Any assistance you could give with minor spelling errors would be appreciated. In truth, I have a massive issue with spelling, and actually have my whole life. I would probably be unable to participate in this community were it not for repeated and extensive use of a spell checker, and even then there are some words I am actually unable to use due to my inability to spell them close enough for the checker to catch. This is actually a rather embarrassing issue that I have dealt with for the majority of my life. Thank you for taking the time to post about it, rather then just quietly make the changes.
As for the sentence, it is written as such by design. The Church of The Broken God is filled with many, many people in the grip of near-constant religious mania. Think some psychotic doomsday cult, but with actual basis on facts, so to speak. If the text seems somewhat disjointed and odd, it is in the hopes of insinuating that the writer is disjointed and odd as well.
Forgive me if this was unduly harsh, but i've been having a exceptionally bad day…and it's still early.
I like the implication here of a schism or heresy within the CotBG. The imagery is definitely very vivid and reminiscent of some of the stranger prophets/prophecies in the Bible (I'm looking at you, John of Patmos!). Good work!
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Thanks, that was kind of what i was shooting for…everyone seems to think a religion is a single, cohesive unit. In reality, there are tons of fractures, divisions and sects…i figured, why should the CotBG be exempt?
everyone seems to think a religion is a single, cohesive unit. In reality, there are tons of fractures, divisions and sects…i figured, why should the CotBG be exempt?
This statement encompasses at least 50% of why I love this. The other 50% is that the imagery in here is great.
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