SCP-203 / Discussion

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judgedeadd 10 Dec 2009 19:34

So, it's basically a man made into a cyborg against his will. That sounds very much like SCP-564 and SCP-137. Thus downvoted for unoriginality. Sorry.

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zaratustra 16 Dec 2009 19:38

I thought it was a robot using a hollowed out person as its outer 'skin'.

MrUnimport 10 Dec 2009 22:11

I actually like this one a bit more than the others, and a lot more than SCP-137.

Djoric 10 Dec 2009 22:40

I like it too. I think the part about the 72 hour run time could use some better wording, and I'm iffy on the painkiller srequests (he can't really request anything when he can't talk), but elsewise I like it.

Chungy McBungy 15 Dec 2009 22:00

Thanks for the comments, guys. I do apologize for the unoriginality and some of the illogical parts, but I made a revision today that I hope will improve these aspects immensely.

Leicontis 15 Dec 2009 22:11

One thing I definitely like about the writeup is how well it plays up the cold amorality of Foundation researchers: "A presumably formerly-human entity in continuous pain requesting painkillers? We'll think about it. Maybe. Ooh, when threatened or harmed, it does something interesting! Send a D-Class in to torture it with a Taser!"

tunedtoadeadchannel 17 Dec 2009 05:43

Hrrm… I'm on the fence here. On the one hand, this is another tortured soul cyborg… on the other, it's very well portrayed, and the description has some nice body horror. I actually found myself a bit sympathetic. But back to the first hand… When provoked, it releases a sound that liquifies brains. No. Stop. Really? Not only is that over the top and silly, it makes no scientific sense.

There's no way a sound could melt a brain. More specifically, there's no way it could melt just a brain. There's no inherent process in the human body that could lead to brain-meltery, simply because brains do not work that way. This tells us that the damage is done by the sound itself, rather than an internal process triggered by it. That doesn't work either. Now, brains are more than capable of sizzling nicely, yes, but, they're surrounded by several layers of stuff, most of which is similarly positioned on the sliding scale of melty sizzleability. There's no logical reason this sound could magically pass through the other stuff and leave it completely unharmed, yet physically destroy the brain. At the very least, there would have to be an entry wound of some sort.

Basically, my point here is that this article could be good were it
1) less generic, and
2) contained less comic book bullshit. As hard as I've tried to like this one, brain melting is silly. Downvoted.

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MisterFlames 05 Mar 2010 08:50

Got a point, Yoric. The brain melting is a bit… well, weird. There are a lot of things here that defy our understanding, and this cyborg has more than a bit of them.

I think I'll stay on the fence for now, pending an edit.

Sophia Light 08 Jun 2010 02:39

I'm not a huge fan. The text of the article is predictable, reads a bit too emotional in some parts, and doesn't hold my attention well.

Chungy McBungy 08 Jun 2010 22:36

I don't really have a problem with the text being predictable, as I was trying to make it sound as clinical as possible. However, I can see where you noticed some of the emotion. Not sure how I should reword it, though.

Pineapple of Despair 27 Sep 2010 00:21

Personally, I like this SCP a lot and have upvoted it. In fact, I listed it as my favourite SCP both times I completed my application form… Here is why.

To begin with, I'm fond of cyborgs (in the general sense, not just enhanced humans) in general.

Secondly, the article evokes a very strong mental images - both visual, portraying what "looks" to me like a shambling mass of rusting metal very strongly dominating the mangled biological component, and emotional. As far as I'm concerned, SCP-564 comes nowhere near 203 in this respect.

Next, the contrast between the high-tech concept of a cyborg like that and its abilities on one hand, and how crude the mechanical components appear on the other, definitely possesses certain appeal.

Finally, I like what is unsaid. Who made SCP-203? Where was it made? When was it made? And finally, what is it for - especially if it can indeed "reproduce"? Here, too, I find 203 superior to 564.

Just my 2 cents.

Nohxis 31 Dec 2010 00:29

I agree with Pineapple. I actually really like where this could go. It's just frakking creepy to think about some metal monstrosity tearing its way through human tissue and then ending up being as frightened and tortured as any human would be.
I mostly agree with Yoric about the scream, but then again, the things dealt with by the Foundation are supposed to defy rational explanation. I think if it was re-imagined a bit, it could work.
Otherwise a really intriguing article. Good work.

Silence Dogood 31 Dec 2010 03:33

I, too agree with Pineapple (and Nohxis) - particularly on the physical description. I often have a really hard time envisioning things described only in text, but this absolutely drew a picture in my head.

Salman Corbette 27 Feb 2011 07:05

I'm not sure why, but this article almost made me cry, the first to do this on the site. He's just a man with a miserable life who wants to be left alone.

alphatoomega 19 Nov 2012 01:48

You think this is bad? Try SCP-027. (Forgive the necropost).

NobodyPro 25 Feb 2012 03:43

I really enjoyed the imagery in this SCP. By the way, based on the above comments: Has the effect of the scream been changed since then? It causes haemorrhaging at the moment.

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