Dear Diary / Discussion

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Nioki 07 Dec 2009 01:10

I welcome any suggestions for changes/editing.

Bravo!

Jack Rankin 07 Dec 2009 01:34

Honestly? Rather damn good. I'd love to see this turned into a short film! There's the occasional moment where something doesn't quite seem to make sense, and I think I spotted a typo or two, but major editing might ruin the air of suspense - don't do anything drastic!

pauli133 08 Jul 2012 21:59

There is something interesting about the idea of Foundation produced morality plays for junior researchers.

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Communism will win 31 Aug 2012 09:11

I am officially calling for a review of this article. Please read this and, if you are so inclined, vote on it and post your thoughts here.

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if your reading this your gay

thedeadlymoose 19 Sep 2012 02:27

Breaks suspension of disbelief in that I just can't picture Foundation agents being this stupid. You could make a case that J.N.'s portrayal is to blame for that, but it still isn't well-written enough to overcome that problem for me.

I mean seriously. I'm not a well-trained Foundation agent and I called the ending from the second the dude picked up the diary towards the end. Even if this is a Foundation-produced schlocky morality play (which pauli suggests, but which the article does not indicate), I'd expect it to be more clever or at least more interesting or entertaining.

Bland 19 Sep 2012 16:51

I'm thinking this would be better as a Foundation Safety Film: "SCP SAFETY AND YOU!"

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RJB_R 12 Jan 2013 20:55

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This is really hard for me to read, because it's so cringe-inducing. If it was obviously trying to be farcical, and made the dialog less painful to read, then it could be something, but it doesn't, so it isn't.

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Drewbear 11 Jun 2013 18:43

This is an odd format, but it's endearing to me for some reason. I do like the effect of the SCP in the play-let, but yeah, the dialogue is really narmy. I wouldn't mind seeing someone do some clean-up on this.

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Eskobar 13 Jan 2014 00:50

I really fucking like this. There's nothing here that breaks my suspension of disbelief too much, in that I can see this sort of situation happening in one corner of the Foundation, and I like the plot development. I can live with the dialogue as-is, too. I want this to get more love out and about.