I… what the fuck? what? what the fuck?
Pumpkin… pumpkin foetuses? pumpkin foetus clones?
I'm disgusted, curious and hungry for pumpkins. Goddammit.
+1
I… what the fuck? what? what the fuck?
Pumpkin… pumpkin foetuses? pumpkin foetus clones?
I'm disgusted, curious and hungry for pumpkins. Goddammit.
+1
Was the repetition supposed to be there, or was that an error?
“the fact that the pumpkin showed absolutely no signs of tampering, or that the pumpkin showed absolutely no signs of tampering.”
That was intentional. I wanted to show that the coroner was thoroughly baffled. Thank you for giving it a read.
…This was the Alaska State Fair wasn't it?
I upvoted at the pumpkin man but I'd upvote a second time for my home state if I could.
Oh, it's explicit in the later articles.
Look, don't bother blackboxing the states and stuff if you're going to make it obvious it's in Alaska. Most place names sound fantastical enough to non-Natives that it fits right in here, and the redaction makes little sense, speaking as a local. (Well, Barrow.)
Right on! Yeah, I was wondering about that. Thanks. I'll give it a sweep and maybe get rid of some of those annoying black boxes.
Cheers from a bit south and waaaay west (Diomede).
Did you hear that story Mrs. Goodwin had recorded about the famine?
No! Where can I find it? I hear there are many delightfully terrifying things up in the Nome area. Goat man, UFO's, the works. Got any good ones?
Upvoted, because I really like what you did here, but there are a few things I think can be touched up to really make this shine.
My biggest concern are the SCProcedures.
Tests have confirmed that rapid decomposition begins when SCP-2531 is severed from the vine/stem/umbilical.
Starting here, all of this is directly describing the skip, and would fit better in the description. None of this really is explaining how to contain it (regardless of the fact that it is uncontained). Arguably, this could be reworded to make it containment procedures:
Field agents encountering SCP-2531 are to exercise caution to ensure the vine/stem/umbilical connection is not severed. Efforts are to be made to bring SCP-2531 to term. |
…or something like that
womb-like
umbilical-like
This may be just me, but whenever I see blank-like I cringe a little.In the first example, you don't need it. "volume of the pumpkin’s interior." Works just fine. In the second case "umbilical cord composed of" will suffice.
Are there any stories of SC…
I was really digging the interview prior to this point, where I had to suppress an eye-roll. It is incredibly immersion-breaking for a supposed professional almost let slip information on the top-secret organization they belong to. The rest is fine, but this is plain silly.
Closing Statement: ████████ should be actively monitored for three months. After three months, ████████ should be passively monitored. 1 g of cocaine was confiscated from ████████’s domicile and remains in Foundation holding, should ████████ decide to approach officials about Foundation trespassing and assault. Regular sweeps of ████████ farm and surrounding forest should be scheduled before and during harvest season.
This is the opposite of a problem. This is amazing. Where you could have used the site-wide hand-wave of magic memory-drugs, you took a more interesting path.
Spectacular suggestions. Thank you! I'll get right on cleaning it up a bit.
I really appreciate the clarification of the interviewer slip in the first interview. I wasn't sure about it, but thought it'd add a bit of character to the mysterious Dr. ███████. The original archived material had a lot of information regarding her going off script and eventually getting SCP-2531 removed from her clearance. That seems more tale stuff than SCP actual. Again, thank you.
Cheers!
P.S. On a side note, what do you think of Dr. ███████ going behind the Foundation's back and secretly harboring the Pumpkin Man? Just a fun idea I've been toying with.
P.S. On a side note, what do you think of Dr. ███████ going behind the Foundation's back and secretly harboring the Pumpkin Man? Just a fun idea I've been toying with.
In the article: Nah.
Outside of the article: Headcanoned.
Maybe write it as a tale.
Definitely as a tale. I really want to play with Pumpkin Man once he's out and about doing all the creepy things the Pumpkin Man does.
Thanks again for your feedback. Very helpful.
In each occurrence, SCP-2531 has been discovered sealed within Cucurbita maxima (commonly known as giant squash or giant pumpkin).
I laughed and hit the upvote button at that point. Nice accompanying picture on the article, too.
Good work, author!
I was like "What the fuck is this sh…I mean it's not…but it just….goddammit that's good."
Thematically appropriate for the season, weird, and one of the few examples of "uncontained" that doesn't make me roll my eyes.
Nice'un! +1