I like the premise of SCP-9912 but I feel like it has more of a series I feel.
Novote
EDIT: oh wait I’m an idiot, this is MEANT to be a series I style SCP
woilef
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This is a cool premise. I like that you gave us a clear and detailed description of what the fucked up angel actually looks like. It's nice to get details like that of exactly what to imagine sometimes. Refreshing.
Totally caught me off guard with the eating its subjects part. I thought this would be a wholesome guardian angel story, haha. Also, love the detail that the subjects don't care that they will be eaten, implying the entity has significant effects on their minds/ways of thinking.
Cool!
Edit: I suggest adding a section to the containment procedures about how a new subject is introduced to the entity following the death of the old one. Like maybe some D-classes are housed nearby so one of them will be chosen, or whatever you want to write for that procedure. That seems like essential information for the people containing the entity.
i find this very disquieting and emotionally ambiguous. i like it a lot.
poet
I thought I knew where this was going and then I realized I didn't. The juxtaposition of the initial description and stinger actually subverted my expectation while being evocatively creepy and I appreciate that.
Torn on this one, since conceptually almost the entire article is just describing something that kills you and how it behaves, and I feel like I'd pick at this during idea crit, but actually reading the thing I greatly enjoyed it. I don't think the ending twist is that startling, but I do think the overall imagery and concept is strong enough to stand as a novel murder monster. +1
not only does this not fit Series 0 at all, this is pretty much just a banal murder monster and the most basic interpretation of the prompt "Your Guardian Angel" (which was already claimed by someone in the S0cord…)
i find this very disquieting and emotionally ambiguous. i like it.
Maybe I don't get series 0, but this just isn't interesting. I do like how rote the whole process is, but other than it obviously being reminiscent of animal agriculture, it doesn’t really go anywhere. The little kernel of intrigue at the end is cool, but I also feel like we don't get enough. I do like the word "clean-up" in the ConProcs, though. Very visceral in context.
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