Hey! When I saw your hook, I was immediately interested, however, I’ve got some critique I’d like to share with you.
Uniqueness:
First off, the idea is cool, but I don’t see what makes it unique. What sets it apart from another digital anomaly? Can it affect anything else? Is it sentient? An anomaly that forces a person to obsess over it until they die feels fairly common. Highlighting a unique property or twist will make it stand out.
Concept / Narrative:
The concept feels a bit vague. I don’t get a lot of information about what the anomaly actually does beyond the one sentence provided. I’d like to see more details and a stronger narrative.
If you expand on the story and show why this anomaly is special, it will give reviewers a clearer idea of how to respond and how to help improve it.
Questions to Consider:
Ask yourself -
What story are you trying to tell?
How is this different from other digital anomalies?
What details can make the narrative stronger without changing the defined consequences?
We want to see your story, not a copy of another idea. Don’t be afraid to show your vision fully.
Conclusion:
That’s all I can really say for now, thanks for sharing your concept. Once the narrative and uniqueness are expanded, I can give more detailed feedback. The concept has potential; I just need more information and clarity on what makes it distinct.
Hope this helps, and I look forward to seeing your updates!
