Thanks to Zyn, MrWrong, and Crayne for feedback while this was a draft!
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I am conflicted. On one hand, there's a lot going on here, and I don't feel like most of it pays off in a satisfying way. On the other hand, I am absolutely fucking in love with the concept of anomalous plays, and this one fits nicely next to 701 in that particular category.
I feel like the O5 redaction is entirely unnecessary, and the note at the end feels sort of forced.
All that being said, tentative +1.
I don't necessarily mind the introduction of "all stories are true" as the main thrust of an article. It's been done before, but then everything's been done before. I didn't really care for how literal it was in this iteration, though, and I feel that this flavor of the Note at the End trope that gets endlessly abused around here is fairly weak writing. I think there might have been other ways to get the kicker across without having someone directly explain it to the reader.
The note at the end is something I've gotten negative feedback about a few times… I'm gonna go for a better way in a sec. Thanks for this
Aaand done. You guys are right, this feels a lot less forced. I think
One of these days you and Kalinin need to do a collaboration. If you two don't kill each other in the process, the results could be incredible.
It'd be more like Alien vs. Predator. Whoever wins, we lose™
(account deleted)SCP-2591 is an animate human cadaver, possessing a regenerative ability to extend life. As a result of this regeneration, SCP-2591's skin condition mimics the effects of mummification.
This line gave me enough justification for a preliminary downvote. It strikes me as unprofessional, poorly worded, and beyond that, very cliché. I continued reading in hopes of anything to redeem that, and I found disjointed, tacked on narrative, and interviews that provide little additional content. I found it dull and uninteresting, -1.
I like it. It's a simple story, engaging dialogue, and some fascinating metaphors towards the end.1 You sent me a PM requesting that I look over it and my apologies for not getting to it sooner, in any case, I'm inclined to upvote your piece.
Footnotes
1. Were you drawing comparisons between yourself and Benigni? Probably just a coincidence but it's a neat idea.
Haha, thanks. You're not too far off about the Benigni metaphor - my experience as a writer did play a part in this.
That being said, I mostly just love the works of Verdi. :P
The only thing that really bothers me about this is the idea that the Foundation would actively open portals to unknown dimensions and bring things back from them, for no good reason. Aren't they supposed to be protecting normality, not introducing new abnormalities to the world? They're lucky this one was benign, as what if it had turned out to be keter? I recall an SCP which had the Foundation exploring other dimensions and the mere presence of the agents in those worlds caused them to be destroyed, and they were lucky their home reality didn't meet the same fate. The same thing could have easily happened here - for all they knew, bringing this guy or even a sample of him back could have caused an XK scenario or worse. So I find that to be a problem here.
I get what you're saying, and I think it would do me well to clarify why they took Riccardo back from the portal: they're using him to learn more about this alternate reality, and whether or not it's dangerous.
You know what, this skip really clicked for me when I read the ending addenda. The idea of these individuals stuck in limbo due to their "story remaining unfinished" was pretty good, and I dig how exasperated you portray the researcher interviewing the melodramatic subject.
+1. Its a pretty alright article.
Not bad. I actually read a similar theme from a manga of which title I cannot remember clearly now. The story involved a ghostly entity conjured from an unfinished story which a girl, the author of the story, was dissatisfied with the ending and burnt the manuscript.
I'm not accusing you of any plagiarism - rather, I'm pleased to see the concept come to life in a different, yet impressive way through this article. So, yeah, I'm pretty much fond of this scip.
And as always, I demand translation for the title
(According to freetranslation.com it means "The duke will take revenge", is that right?)
Thanks!
Regarding this other story, I was not aware of it. However, the author in question wrote the ending then burned the manuscript. In Riccardo's case, the ending was never written, and the manuscript still existed and was eventually published.
And that's the translation, but I used Google translate myself.
I was skeptical at first, thinking that its just another semi mummified guy with a tragically life. But that last bit was good.
The idea that another reality is affected by a story in this reality, or maybe even that the whole other reality was created by Benigni's imagination made me quite interested.
On a side note: Footnotes 1 and 3 are pretty cool. Now I'm imagining a mummy singing opera.
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